Do Now

1. 1. Copy your homework. 2. Take out your essay. **Write Draft #2 on top.3. On the top of your essay write down one question or concern you have about your writing piece. Do Now

2. Objectives: • Critically take Cornell Notes and participate in class discussion during an overview of transitions. • Demonstrate the ability to incorporate effective components of transitions into an essay to help your essay read smoothly.

3. Writer’s Workshop GOALS: Thursday, 2//20 1) Share Body Paragraphs • Point out to your elbow partner his/her one body paragraph that needs stronger support. Does your partner just TELL details OR does your partner SHOW (tells us a story, makes it interesting, explains, supports the how or why it is an obstacle)? 2) Adding Transitions • Add paragraph hooks, paragraph ideas, and transition words and phrases to your essay to make sure your essay reads smoothly. 3) Improve your Draft • Use “Smiley Face” tricks to improve your writing • Look in the writing section of your binder for a reference or on the wall 

4. TRANSITIONS Holding it all together

5. Do these paragraphs have anything in common? Girls spend far too much time in front of a mirror. They seem to spend at least half their waking hours examining their pores or brushing their eyelashes or adjusting a curl over their right ear to an exact 45-degree angle. They primp constantly. Girls tend to be good students. They do their assignments faithfully and neatly, organize their work well, and maintain consistently high grades.

6. Yes! They are both about girls. But could they ever appear consecutively in an essay? The answer is yes—provided they were properly linked: Primp as they may, however, girls tend to be good students. . . .

7. Take notes: Definition and examples

8. Types of transitional devices:(1) Transitional Words(2) Paragraph/Idea Hooks(3) Combinations of #1 and #2*All devices are equally useful. The best writer has a varied style and utilizes all three devices.

9. Transitional Words • Transitional words come in the form of specific words and phrases. Using transitional words is moreover a matter of selection. • Transitional words can be used within a paragraph OR between paragraphs. Paul is legally blind. Paul is legally blind. He is a good goalie. However, he is a good goalie. The project had value. Admittedly, the project had value. It wasted time. Even so, it was a waste of time. He was a brilliant actor. He was, to be sure, a brilliant actor, He often performed miserably. yet he often performed miserably.

10. Some Transitional Words/Phrases Admittedly In addition On the other hand And In fact Still Assuredly Indeed The fact remains But It is true that Therefore Certainly Moreover Thus Clearly Nevertheless To be sure Consequently No doubt True Even so Nobody denies Undoubtedly Furthermore Obviously Unquestionably Granted Of course Yet

11. Paragraph Hooks Repeat a word or phrase from your previous paragraph to show a connection between the two paragraphs

12. Paragraph Hooks Transitional words cannot handle the transitional load on their own. Furthermore, using transitional words alone repeatedly in your writing makes your transitions almost too obvious. Paragraph hooks link the ideas in your paragraphs together without relying on an overused, common word or phrase. Instead, you use your own ideas to link your paragraphs.

13. My grandfather is a man of much kindness. He has warm eyes and an enthusiastic smile. He speaks softly and gently so that anyone would want to listen to his stories. He writes some of the darkest poetry. Often I am scared by his poems. Furthermore, he writes some of the darkest poetry? Undeniably, he writes some of the darkest poetry? But he writes some of the darkest poetry?

14. These are all too abrupt so we need a paragraph hook!

15. A paragraph hook… My grandfather is a man of much kindness. He has warm eyes and an enthusiastic smile. He speaks softly and gently so that anyone would want to listen to his stories. My grandfather’s kindness may seem questionable since he writes some of the darkest poetry. Often I am scared by his poems.

16. A deeper paragraph hook… My grandfather is a man of much kindness. He has warm eyes and an enthusiastic smile. He speaks softly and gently so that anyone would want to listen to his stories. One would never imagine a man with warm eyes and an enthusiastic smile to write such dark poetry. Often I am scared by his poems.

17. Idea Hooks Reference an idea from the previous paragraph to show a connection between the two paragraphs

18. Idea Hooks Idea hooks are very similar to paragraph hooks because they also do not rely on an overused, common transitional word. Rather than use a word or phrase from the paragraph before, idea hooks use an idea presented in the previous paragraph.

19. An idea hook… My grandfather is a man of much kindness. He has warm eyes and an enthusiastic smile. He speaks softly and gently so that anyone would want to listen to his stories. One would never imagine this image of my grandfather from reading his poetry. He writes some of the darkest poetry. Often I am scared by his poems.

20. Challenge! • Put an where you feel your writing is too abrupt and needs a transition. • I personally challenge you to use more than just transitional words in your writing. • Try to get some paragraph and idea hooks in as well!