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1. iTrackREd Paragraphs Part One Golden Rules

2. Tweet what you learnt in your last lesson summarising in less than 140 characters Twitter Education

3. Paragraphs Objectives: Reading: To identify when to start a new paragraph Writing: To apply paragraph rules to improve writing Select an image and write a descriptive story.

4. Building up paragraphs Letters, reports or stories need an introduction, middle and an end. To help the reader it is best to split into paragraphs. A paragraph is group of sentences that share the same topic. You use paragraphs to structure your writing and to make it easier for the reader to follow… The secret of writing good paragraphs is separation (dividing the text into chunks) and continuity.

5. Paragraphs Start a new paragraph when something changes. When to finish a paragraph and start a new one is a tricky business. You need to learn the rules, so let’s start with the golden rule ... There are five types of things that could change ...

6. Paragraphs Rule No 1: When something new happens ... Ant and Dec had been waiting for ages. There was nothing to do until the judges came back. Suddenly they heard a funny noise. It started so quietly they could hardly hear it, but it grew louder until it became unbearable. Then they saw the bats – little, fierce things flying towards them. There were hundreds of them...

7. Rule No 2: When you write about a different place … One morning, when Simon Cowell went for a walk in the park, a runner bumped into him and ran off. Simon felt for his mobile; it was gone! He set off in hot pursuit, pounced on the man and demanded, “Give me the mobile!” The man promptly handed it over. Every time your writing moves to another place you need to start a new paragraph. This helps the reader to see that you are writing about something different. On returning to his office, Simon discovered he left his mobile on the desk!

8. Rule No 3: When your text moves to a different time ... Sometimes your writing (letter, email or report etc) will move in time. It can go backwards or forwards describing something that happened at different time. Mr Bean returned his mobile to the shop, explaining that there seemed to be something loose inside it, and hurried out to catch a bus. Two weeks later, he went back to the shop. Mr Bean had not given his name so he described the mobile and what had been wrong with it. The assistant found it, with a ticket reading: ‘old man – screw loose’.

9. Rule No 4: Each time a person speaks ... Robson Green was filming a new episode of ‘Extreme Fishing’. Whilst he was sitting in his boat taking a break, a reporter came up to the end of the jetty to interview him.“Have you caught anything?” the reporter asked.“I haven’t caught a thing all day,” growled Robson angrily. He was trying to eat his lunch and wasn’t happy being interrupted during his break.Better luck tomorrow!” replied the reporter. “You never know what you might catch then. Maybe a shark!”“There aren’t any sharks around here,” said Robson.“What’s that then?” the reporter asked, pointing to the big grey fin in the water. Every time someone starts speaking, start a new paragraph. That includes when one person stops talking and someone else starts …

10. Rule No 5: When you talk about a new person (or topic) ... Nadal swung his racket and smacked the ball up into the air, it flew up into the sky and then fell like a stone onto Jordan’s head. Jordan was normally a quiet friendly lady. She had been watching the tennis match for five minutes or so, without saying anything. When out of the blue the ball hit her and suddenly she burst into tears.

11. Mistakes to avoid ...... It’s all about breaking your writing into chunks, so that I (the reader) can understand what your text is about! Learn these rules and use them in the assessment to get good results! Miss Marks The Examiner So, remember the five times you have to use paragraphs are when: 1) something new happens, 2) you talk about a new person, 3) someone speaks, 4) you write about a different place 5) when you move to a different time. Plan and draft writing Wt/E3.1Organise writing in short paragraphs Wt/E3.2 Write in complete sentences Ws/E3.1

12. ParagraphsDescriptive Writing Task Write a descriptive story based on one of the images on the following slide (at least 250 words). Use a varied range of sentences and vocabulary to keep your audience’s interest. Keep punctuation accurate and produce logical paragraphs to make your meaning clear. Develop plot, characters and/or settings within your narrative. Write with flair and originality.

13. Write a story based on one of the images above.

14. Plenary & Self Assessment Review learning objectives: Reading: Were you able to identify when to start a new paragraph? Writing: Were you able to apply the paragraph rules to improve your writing? Did you remember to complete your self assessment grid?

15. Self Assessment What really made you think this lesson? What have you learnt? What did you find difficult? What do you need more help with? If you were teaching this class, what would you change? What activities would you have done?

16. Peer Assessment Write a list of all the things you thought your partner did really well. Include things linked to the objectives, but also include things that were not. Write a list of everything s/he did right. Give examples.