Word Choice: Tired Words • To engage the reader • To improve your credibility • To be more precise with language
Example • EXAMPLE: The room did not smell good. • REVISION: The family kitchen reeked of an unknown rotten food. • Why is the revision better than the original example?
Common Tired Words • A lot / Lots • Good • Bad • Said • Thing • Gets • Interesting • Really • Nice • Happy
Put the “tired words” to rest. Then, put better alternatives in the dream bubble.
Using the Same Idea: Improve These • The man went down the street. • She cooked a desert. • The teacher said something to the boys. • The dog barked at something. • We were afraid when we looked down.
Apply this to Analytical Writing Atticus has courage because he is always trying to be good with Scout during the good times and the bad. He teaches her about important and interesting things like when he tells her not to fight with anyone. This shows courage because he knows she is licked, but he tries to teach her a good lesson anyways.
Caution • http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=DW1lxwsK5_Q • What is the problem? • BEWARE of misuse or overuse of the thesaurus.
Writing Workshop Assignment Part 1: Correct your own writing: • Choose at least 10 examples of poor word choice: either tired or overdone words. • On a separate sheet of paper, either copy and paste (on your computer) or just write out the sentences including those words. • Then offer a more fitting word for the sentence.
Part 2: Start from Scratch • Draw a picture of one of the most significant scenes from the novel. (in color) • On the back, describe in detail what is happening in the scene. (4-6 sentences) • Then, explain why you think this specific moment is so powerful. (4-6 sentences) • Use appropriate, precise and engaging word choice.