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  1. SMARTIES! Your Keys to a FOUR…

  2. S.M.A.R.T.I.E.S.

  3. Show, don’t tell.

  4. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.

  5. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with…

  6. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with… Read and revise.

  7. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with… Read and revise.Title is a must!

  8. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with… Read and revise.Title is a must!Indent all paragraphs.

  9. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with… Read and revise.Title is a must!Indent all paragraphs.Emotional rollercoaster!

  10. Show, don’t tell.My voice is unique.All sentences end and begin with… Read and revise.Title is a must!Indent all paragraphs.Emotional rollercoaster!Spelling check

  11. how, don’t tell! S Telling is BORING! Show it with vivid action verbs. Telling: He was excited about opening the Christmas gifts. Showing: Within two seconds, he was up and dashing to the Christmas tree. (Falyn Knebel)

  12. how, don’t tell! S Telling: I was nervous. I wanted to tell my dad that I loved him, but I couldn’t. Showing: A scorching hot sensation encroached my body, and a sudden surge of pressure was hoisted onto my shoulders. My mind urged me forward and signaled me to tell him how much I loved him, but all I could manage was a mere squeak. (Amber Boeker)

  13. how, don’t tell! S Telling: I was so hungry that I ate the entire power bar, and then I thanked her. Showing: I gratefully tore into the bar, devouring every last crumb before smiling sheepishly and thanking her. (Paige Rivera)

  14. y Voice is Unique! M • My paper will stand out from the others. • My personality and emotions are evident in my writing.

  15. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: We thought we might be able to win. With Voice: A feeling of hope began to shower down on our team. (Eric Duong)

  16. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: I was crying as I waved goodbye. I remembered all our good times. With Voice: As the tears flew down my face, I waved with a half-smile remembering all the good times we had. “This won’t be the end,” I thought to myself. (Caroline Hamilton)

  17. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: We got in the truck and sped off. With Voice: We hopped into our Chevy truck and sped away, leaving a trail of dust in our driveway. (Kaitlyn Cox)

  18. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: I watched out the window as the plane landed, and I couldn’t wait to get off. With Voice: My eyes were glued to the window as we touched down, itching to get off the plane. (Mason Edgar)

  19. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: I watched out the window as the plane landed, and I couldn’t wait to get off. With Voice: My eyes were glued to the window as we touched down, itching to get off the plane. (Mason Edgar)

  20. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day! Without Voice: “Gwen?” I yelled, prepared for her to jump out at me. With Voice: “Gwen?” I yelled, preparing for one of her notorious jump-out-from-nowhere-and-scare-you assaults. (Wes Kruse)

  21. y Voice is Unique! M My paper will stand out from the other hundreds that are read that day!. With Voice: We walked into Mrs. Hathaway’s class. Mrs. Hathaway was just teaching away. I could hear her, but I didn’t know what she was saying. The only thing on my mind was her. That girl. All I could see was her face in my mind. I needed to find out what her name was.

  22. y Voice is Unique! Practice! Rewrite each sentence with voice. (You can write more than one sentence.) We could not wait to get into the water. The drive was long and boring. If we didn’t win the game, our season would end. 4. She lived at the end of the two-mile dirt road. 5. The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. M

  23. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: We could not wait to get into the water. Voice: The crisp breeze engulfed my body as the roar of the waves crashed against the glistening limestone. My heart pounded and my legs yearned to feel the rush of the cool water. -Amber Boeker M

  24. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: We could not wait to get into the water. Voice: We sprinted with anticipation, unable to stay out of the water any longer. -Emily Tolliver M

  25. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: We could not wait to get into the water. Voice: The dreaded heat was hard to bear, so with a towel in one hand and a floatie in the other, we raced to the water to cool our sun-burnt skin. -Faith Nutt M

  26. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: We could not wait to get into the water. Voice: I was on the edge of my seat with my eyes glued to the clock. With each tick, I knew I was one more step closer to the finish line of school. Two more ticks and I would be strutting to the lake to splash in the cool relaxing water. -Kylie Antkowiak M

  27. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The drive was long and boring. Voice: As I stared out of the car window only to find endless seas of corn, it dawned on me that this wasn’t just a run-of-the-mill boring car trip: it was flat out torture. -Wes Kruse M

  28. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The drive was long and boring. Voice: The drive to our grandma’s house was eating away at our brains and consuming us with boredom. -Cash Conway M

  29. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The drive was long and boring. Voice: It seemed like I had been sitting there for days, but it had only been six hours. “How much longer do I have to ride in the back of this S.U.V.?” I wondered. -Samantha Holle M

  30. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The drive was long and boring. Voice: The dull, monotonous drive through the seemingly endless deserted valley, harboring only minute grains of sand, slowly grinded on my nerves turning them into bloody nubs. -Christian Rhodes M

  31. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The drive was long and boring. Voice: The entire four-day drive, I kept bouncing between boredom, anxiety, and needing to go to the bathroom. -Ivy Haycox M

  32. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: If we did not win this game, our season would be over. Voice: If we did not use our strategies on this chess match, our life-long goals, and our season, would be crushed into a fine powder. -Vicki Elms M

  33. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: If we did not win this game, our season would be over. Voice: The clock was running out of time, and we saw a wave of frowns migrating to each side of the stadium. Our hearts sank and we knew if we didn’t win, our season would end. -Dallas Gonzales M

  34. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: If we did not win this game, our season would be over. Voice: Our season was perched on our shoulders as we went into the ninth inning. -Justin Lackey M

  35. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: She lived at the end of the two-mile dirt road. Voice: Many children lived in great houses with good driveways, but Suzy McNeil lived in a shack at the end of a two-mile clay road. -Angela Ho M

  36. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: She lived at the end of the two-mile dirt road. Voice: We rode bumpily down the old, forgotten road to find a small house where my aunt lived. -Bess Newman M

  37. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: As I peeked over on Garrett’s paper, the teacher yelled, “Michael, are you cheating?” I could feel my heart stop. Sweat started to come down my face as I stared at her blankly. -Brandon Rougeau M

  38. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: As our teacher’s eyes beamed at us like lasers, we were too frightened to say a word. -DeQuincy Lewis M

  39. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: The teacher stared down at us with the eyes of an owl; no one dared move nor speak a word. -Mariah Webb M

  40. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: The teacher had boiling smoke coming out of her ears, but even then, nobody responded. We were so scared, we were like frozen ice cubes and couldn’t move. -Cynthia Botello M

  41. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: Our teacher’s stares felt like daggers as she moved around the room, but everyone was frozen in place and their voices had been captured in their throats. -Vicki Elms M

  42. y Voice is Unique! Without Voice: The teacher stared at us, but no one could move or respond. Voice: The teacher had boiling smoke coming out of her ears, but even then, nobody responded. We were so scared, we were like frozen ice cubes and couldn’t move. -Cynthia Botello M

  43. y Voice is Unique! Voice: “Alright,” Mrs. Lange said, “Where’s Ivy?” Her words alone stared a gaping hole through each student’s forehead, but her eyes were enough to drive you mad. “She skipped class!” Braiden finally screamed, in tears that he had to be the one to tell. -Ivy Haycox M

  44. ll sentences end with punctuation and begin with a capital letter. A • I have checked each one!

  45. ead and revise. R • Proofreading is important! • I read my paper before turning it in, and I made sure it said what I meant to say. • I found some places to add similes or metaphors.

  46. itle is a must! T • A “4” without a title doesn’t happen. • My title fits my story. • I doubt anyone else has the same title as me.

  47. ndent all paragraphs. I • A paper without paragraphs screams, “I don’t know how to write!” • I’ve used the width of my finger to indent each paragraph.

  48. motional rollercoaster! E • Without different emotions, my paper is BORING! • I know what emotions the reader will feel when they read my story. • My story doesn’t sound superficial.

  49. S pelling has been checked! • I have a dictionary for a reason. • I have checked the words I’m not sure about. • There, they’re, and their; its, it’s… • Numbers and “&” are spelled out