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Hello . WITHOUT TALKING, open your Writer’s Notebook and draw a line. How would you revise the following paragraph to make the words more accurate and specific?.
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Hello WITHOUT TALKING, open your Writer’s Notebook and draw a line. How would you revise the following paragraph to make the words more accurate and specific? To get something from a music Web site just go there and grab the one you want from the store. Put it in a playlist and be sure to get all the right information about it. To see the latest podcasts or RSS feeds, check your music site, too. There’s nothing to it.
Think About: • Have I used nouns and modifiers that help the reader see a picture? • Did I avoid using words that might confuse the reader? • Did I try a new word, and if so, did I check to make sure I used it correctly? • Are these the best words that can be used?
WORD CHOICE using specific and accurate words
The TRAITS OF WRITING CONVENTIONS IDEAS ARE SENTENCE FLUENCY ORGANIZATION Checking Spelling Findinga Topic VOICE Well-Built Sentences Creating a Lead Punctuating/Paragraphing WORD CHOICE Establishing a Tone Focusing the Topic including Varying Sentence Types Sequence/Transition Words Applying Strong Verbs Conveying a Purpose and Developing the Topic Structuring the Body Selecting Striking Words/Phrases and Connecting to Audience Using Specific/Accurate Words “Using Specific/Accurate Words”
OR OR MARINE BIOLOGIST? ADULT CHILD
OR OR MARINE BIOLOGIST? ADULT CHILD
OR OR MARINE BIOLOGIST? ADULT CHILD
How well do these similes and metaphors create a clear visual image in the reader’s mind? • Her face was a perfect oval, like a circle that hat its two sides gently compressed by a thigh exerciser. • His thoughts tumbled in his head, making and breaking alliances like socks in a dryer. • She grew on him like she was a colony of E. coli and he was room-temperature Canadian beef.
How well do these similes and metaphors create a clear visual image in the reader’s mind? • She had a deep, throaty, genuine laugh, like a dog gagging. • Her vocabulary was as bad as, like, whatever. • The little boat gently drifted across the pond exactly the way a bowling ball wouldn’t. • Her hair glistened in the rain like a nose hair after a sneeze.
How well do these similes and metaphors create a clear visual image in the reader’s mind? • John and Mary had never met. They were like two hummingbirds who had also never met. • The ballerina rose gracefully en pointe and extended one slender leg behind her, like a dog at a fire hydrant. • It hurt the way your tongue hurts after you accidentally staple it to the wall.
In your personal reading/AR book… Find a passage that exemplifies good use of specific and accurate words. Be ready to read your passage out loud to the class and explain your choice.
In your current piece of writing… 1. …use the “Think Abouts” on the next slide to revise at least 5 words. Circle the word you are changing in RED and write the new word above it. 2. …add in an appropriate simile or metaphor to help create a clear visual image in your reader’s mind. Highlight your addition.
Think About: • Have I used nouns and modifiers that help the reader see a picture? • Did I avoid using words that might confuse the reader? • Did I try a new word, and if so, did I check to make sure I used it correctly? • Are these the best words that can be used?