学生习作评讲

1. 学生习作评讲

2. 评分标准 • 1. 本题总分为25分，按5个档次给分。 • 2. 评分时，先根据文章的内容和语言初步确定其所属档次，然后以该档次 的要求来衡量，确定或调整档次，最后给分。 • 3. 词数少于 80和多于 120的，从总分中减去2分。 • 4. 评分时，应注意的主要内容为：内容要点、应用词汇和语法结构的数量和准确性、上下文的连贯性及语言的得体性。 • 5. 拼写与标点符号是语言准确性的一个方面，评分时，应视其对交际的影 响程度予以考虑。英、美拼写汉词汇用法均可接受。 • 6. 如书写较差，以至影响交际，将分数降低一个档次。 • 7. 内容要点可用不同方式表达，对紧扣主题的适当发挥不予扣分。

4. 怎么写作文 步骤1 审题（时态，体裁，结构） 步骤2 罗列要点（化繁为简） 步骤3 组句成文(连贯性-关联词) 最后 检查 (拼写、大小写、标点等非智力错误)

5. Task 1. Work in pairs of four and find out some Good sentences and phrases that appeared in Your four composition. Then I will ask some Students to read them out.(10min) 一些句子的使用: I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

6. Some good sentences: Task 1. Work in pairs of four and discuss which sentence do you think is the best sentence? And then read them out in front of The class. 一些谚语的使用: A proverb says that Friendship is the most valuable treasure you have. Friendship is the most valuable treasure you have. The teacher is our second parent. It’s said that teachers are the “fathers” in one’s life. 一些词短语的使用: Words failed me when I wanted to show my appreciation to them. We often compare our teachers to candles. I just thought that the study was a breeze for me. I am honored to take some photos with them. I will spare no effort to melt the ice between some of the classmates and I. They’re always anxious about students’ grades so that they can’t have a real rest. 表示感谢的一些表达法: I will show myappreciation to my teachers. I will express my thanks to my teachers for I will thank my teachers for I am grateful to my teachers for I feel gratitude to my teacher for

7. 一些句式的使用: 一些句子的使用: With the encouragement of teachers, with the help of students and with advice of my dear friends, I believe I can leave this school without regret. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. I gradually foundit difficult to catch up with other students in my class. They teach us not only the knowledge the textbook but also the skills of working as well as the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an argument with. What makes me thankful are those my classmates who have been accompanying me for three years so far. It won’t be long before we graduate. I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

8. Task 2. Present some good compositions;(7min) 一些句子的使用: I want to do several things as follows: firstly, we should thank our teachers for their teaching. We often compare our teachers to candles. Indeed, the teachers often devote themselves to us, while they don’t have any complaints. Secondly I want to apologise to someone whohas trouble with me. I wish he or she could accept my apology. After all, I really hope that our friendship could last forever. Of course, I am so sincere. Thirdly, I want to learn about more precious advice from others. So, I can open my heart to listen. Another thing isthat I want to do a meaning thing for our class, because I don’t want to have regrets. For this goal, I must take Action, because I want to leave school with no regrets. I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

9. High school is regarded as the best time of my life. Besides classes and homework, there’s something more that I especially treasure. In order to leave school with no regrets, I will make the best of my limited time to go over the lessons I’ve learned. At the same time, I’d like to show my gratitude to all the teachers who have given me so much help in the past three years. In addition, it’s necessary for me to have a talk with whoever might have misunderstood me, for I do care about the friendship between us. For the purpose of improving myself, I’ll ask my classmates for some advice which may be of great value to me. Last but not least, doing another good deed for my class is also my plan. With these things done, I will have no regrets in my high school life. 一些句子的使用: I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

10. 一些句子的使用: We really need to do something special. First and foremost,we’re supposed to say thanks to our teachers in that they do give us a lot of help. In addition, we ought to have a talk with the classmates who used to misunderstand us. What’s more, we should ask them for help to give us some precious suggestions, especially in study of life. Last but not least, we can do something meaningful to our class before we graduate. To conclude, we should try our best to make the rest of our time in high school more meaningful and unforgettable. I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

11. 一些句子的使用: Task 3. Some problems appeared in the composition(10min) I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

12. check spelling thanks • Express my thinks __________ • 2. Do some meanful things___________ • 3. Get some valueable idea___________ • 4.Find some advices ____________ • 5. I’m eger to kown ____________ • 6. precious opininion___________ meaningful valuable advice eager know opinion

13. check sentences 缺少连接词 1.It’s the place we study together. ____________________________________ 2. In fact, the teachers is likely to our parents. (黄嘉英 __________________________________ 3. It’s not only a place where is full of our all Feeling in three years, but also a place that Can’t forget for forever.（红婷）(连接词的误用) ______________________________________ It’s the place where we study together. In fact, the teachers are like our parents. It’s not only a place that is full of our all feelings in three years, but also a place that can’t be forgotten forever.

14. (缺少引导词) 4. Asking for advices from classmates, they’re someone know you well and you would fet a lot. (佳祺) __________________________________ 5. The first thing is that make great thanks for teachers, because they give us knowledge And lead us to love others. (华煌) _________________________________ 6. We should thanks for teachers’ education.(荣晓) ___________________________________ Asking for advice from classmates, they’re someone who know you well and you would get a lot out of them. (句子成分残缺) The first thing is that we should express great thanks to teachers, because they give Us knowledge and lead us to love others. (词的用法错) We should thank teachers for their education.

15. 7. And you give me much encourage, it make stronger to me. (维顺) ____________________________________ 8. I want to have a talk with some classmates who has misunderstanding with me. _____________________________________ 9. It’s lucky to we can study together. __________________________________________ (两个句子) And you give me much encouragement, which makes me stronger. (主谓一致)) I want to have a talk with some classmates who have misunderstanding with me. (引导词错) It’s lucky that we can study together.

16. 10. I have made a great progress. 名词单复数 I have made great progress. 11. We must thanks to the teachers. (缺少动词) We must say thanks to the teachers. (代词误用) 12. They all hope us could go to the universities. They all hope we could go to the universities.

17. 怎么写作文 步骤1 审题（时态，体裁，结构） 步骤2 罗列要点（化繁为简） 步骤3 组句成文(连贯性-关联词) 最后 检查 (拼写、大小写、标点等非智力错误)

18. 罗列要点 1.向老师表示感谢: 2. 跟对你有误解的同学谈一谈 3. 征求同学的宝贵意见 4. 再为班级作件有意义的事

19. 1.向老师表示感谢: say/ express thanks to our teacher/ thank our teacher for doing sth 2. 跟对你有误解的同学谈一谈:(用定语从句来表达) Have a chat/ talk with the classmates who used to misunderstand you. 3. 征求同学的宝贵意见. We should ask our classmates for help to give us some precious suggestions. 4. 再为班级作件有意义的事. We can do something meaningful to our class.

20. 组句成文 ※为了使结构清楚，要点明了，可以使用如下几组词汇：1）first(ly), second(ly), third(ly), last/ finally 2）to begin with, then, furthermore, finally3）to start with, next, in addition, finally 4）first and foremost, besides, last but not least5）on the one hand, on the other hand6）for one thing, for another thing（适用于 两点的情况）

21. Task 4: Practice( Work in groups of four on how to write the article) 假设你叫李华，现是武汉大学的一名新生。 请你根据以下提示，给你中学英语老师李老师写一封感谢信。表达对他的爱戴和尊敬，词数120左右。 1.你教会了我什么是西方思维方式，这使我获益不少。 2.通过上你的英语课，我对英语学习有了极大的信心。现在能用英语来表达自己的观点。 3.我越来越喜欢英语，同时感谢老师的鼓励与教导。 一些句子的使用: I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Dear Mr Li: I’m very excited to write to express my thanks to you. I am now a freshman of Wuhan University. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

22. 一些句子的使用: I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. Homework: Finish the composition after class. I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.

23. 一些句子的使用: I made up my mind to do some meaningful things, such as present my appreciation To my teachers, without whom I would not be able to achieve my goal like now. Thank you for listening! I gradually found it difficult to catch up with other students. I am in the hope that they could give me some good advice. They teach us not only the knowledge of textbook but also the skill of working as well As the attitude of life. Maybe we should have a talk with our classmates whom we have ever had an Argument with.