RAF5 Explain and comment on the writer’s use of language

1. Year 9 Creating Tension RAF5 Explain and comment on the writer’s use of language

2. What will you learn today? ALL of you will be able to support your opinion about a text and show you understand some significant ideas about the text 4 MOST of you will be able to interpret a text and use supporting quotations and explain the effect of particular words, phrases or techniques 5 SOME of you will be able to recognise and comment on implied meanings and comment on the significance of particular words, phrases and sentences 6

3. What vocabulary could you use to describe the images around the screen? Place this vocabulary into at least two complex sentences and be prepared to share this with the group. For example: Illuminating the white hall of ice, a shadowy light filters through the crevice. Jagged stalagmites peer threateningly from the immeasurable ceiling, although the shapes are strangely alluring.

4. Tension Graph Terrified Frightened Tense Calm 1 2 3 4 5 6 7 8 9

5. How has the writer engaged the interest of the reader? Use of metaphor Emotive language I wanted to cry but couldn’t. I felt paralysed, incapable of thinking, as waves of panic swept through me. The torment of anticipating something unknown and terribly frightening broke free, and for a helpless immeasurable time I hung shaking on the rope with my helmet pressed to the ice wall and my eyes tightly closed. I had to see what was beneath me because, for all my convictions, I didn’t have enough courage to do it blind. Surely it could not make me more frightened. This detailed sentence adds helps build the tension Creates feelings of doubt Adverbs increase tension

6. Writing a PEE paragraph... P The writer uses a metaphor to create a vivid image of the narrator’s increasing anxiety. E The narrator states that “as waves of panic swept through me.” The “waves” of panic resemble the ebb and flow of the waves on the ocean and create the impression that the panic increases and decreases rapidly. The use of the word “swept” also helps suggest the power of the panic, that it is uncontrollable and this help emphasise the feeling of fear. E

7. Now see if you can do the same... 6. The writer has used a range of sentence structures to convey the increasing anxiety of the narrator. 5. Through using a range of emotive vocabulary the narrator has been able to add to the drama of the passage. 4. The writer has explored a variety of moods throughout the passage for effect. These help to engage the reader. Extension The narrative perspective of the text engages the reader throughout the passage. • Remember to put your evidence in quotation marks. • Explore the effect of groups or individual words in your evidence.

8. So what do you think you have managed to achieve? ALL of you will be able to support your opinion about a text and show you understand some significant ideas about the text MOST of you will be able to interpret a text and use supporting quotations and explain the effect of particular words, phrases or techniques SOME of you will be able to recognise and comment on implied meanings and comment on the significance of particular words, phrases and sentences