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Tips For Writing

Tips For Writing. Corrected Body Paragraph.

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Tips For Writing

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  1. Tips For Writing

  2. Corrected Body Paragraph Detail: From Amsterdam News, 1923, Boas stated that there is nothing to show that the white race is superior. He proclaimed that there are people of “low moral standing” in all races. He also felt that the definition of race was too vague, “since there are no hard and fast lines between them” (Race Superiority Bunk).

  3. Body ParagraphWell-Developed Paragraph Formula • Topic sentence (must relate to thesis) • Detail with citation • Commentary about the detail • Transition to next paragraph / topic.

  4. Phrases to start detail • According to _________, • In ____________, one learns that • The author ,_________ ,wrote • The book, ________, describes • Research from ______ indicates • ______ explains

  5. Phrases to start your commentary • This is important because • One can see that • This shows that • The importance here is • This indicates that • This illustrates that • This demonstrates that • From this information, it is clear that

  6. Transitional phrases Hint at what's in the next paragraph: On the other hand, there were other areas that had a huge affect on history.

  7. Also On the other hand This lead to In addition to Furthermore Therefore After Another Eventually In the same way This resulted in Transitions!

  8. Thesis is clear: address 2 parts of prompt and is at the end of the intro Topic sentences match body paragraph Introduce detail with phrase like “According to” if using a direct quote Cite detail in MLA format Introduce commentary with phrase like “This shows that…” Format: double spaced, 12pnt TNR font, last name page number on top right corner of each page Commentary: 2 sentences, does NOT simply repeat the info in your detail Promptis answered: first about industry, capitalism, and imperialism; THEN historical example Works cited page is in ABC order and correct MLA format FORMAL grammar NINE Key terms are UNDERLINED / highlighted Checklist: 1 point each, label each part on the paper

  9. Citation Station: Page 3 • READ THE WHOLE THING • Underline / highlight key points • Pay attention to examples of in-text citation • Highlight key formulas

  10. In-text citation: several options Example: If you mention the author in the paragraph, you only have to cite the page number. According to Professor Bale, of the History department at Yale University… oneself and one’s place in the world" (11). Notice this example explains who this person is and what his qualification is in order to include him as research

  11. STUDENT EXAMPLE • Highlight / underline each component of the WDP and label them

  12. Student example Topic sentence: The Industrial Revolution and capitalism influence the creation of socialism and communism because workers eventually became tired of getting exploited and they creating socialism and communism. introduction to detail Detail one: Karl Marx and Friedrich Engles are considered to be the creators of the socialist system and also created the Communist Manifesto in 1848, and they believed that they always are two classes fighting, the “haves,” the bourgeoisies, and the “have-nots,” the lower class, also known as the proletariats (Goldbaum). Commentary:This explains the conflict between the two classes… Transitional phrase: On the other hand, the working class didn’t agree with this idea

  13. introduction to detail Detail two: Philosophers started to get involved in this conflict; one of them was David Ricardo who said that the “poor were meant to supply the workforce” (“David Ricardo’s Ideas”). Commentary: This means that as the population… Conclusion / transition: These conflicts open the road for socialism because the working class especially didn’t believe in capitalism. Many individuals didn’t know what was best for society.

  14. WRITE YOUR OWN • SEPARATE SHEET OF PAPER, glued on page 4, and Works Cited on page 5 • 20 minutes • Partner check and label each component of paragraph • Write out Prompt: What was the War Guilt Clause in the Treaty of Versailles and what was Germany’s response to it? What were Germany’s main complaints? • Using pages 424 – 427 in your textbook AND the article given to you from the internet. • MUST use one detail from you textbook and one from the article given to you to support your answer. • Create a works cited page (on page 5 of notebook) with the two sources

  15. Example The war guilt clause in the Treaty of Versailles was created to punish Germany for WWI. Germany believed the treaty was harsh and protested against giving up territory. According to the Modern World History textbook, the war guilt clause required Germany to “pay reparations, give up territory such as Alsace-Lorraine, and reduce its military” (Beck et al. 425). This shows that…

  16. Trade with a partner in your group • LABEL each part of the WDP • Topic sentence, detail one, citation, commentary, transition, detail two, commentary, concluding sentence. • HIGHLIGHT or box the phrases used to introduce details and commentary • If not finished, finish at home and show me tomorrow • In this case you may label it yourself

  17. Correct Works Cited for page 5 of notebook Beck, Roger B. et al. Modern World History: Patterns of Interaction. Sacramento: McDougal Little, 2006. Print. Brockdorff-Rantzau, Count von. “Leader of the German Peace Delegation Letter to Paris Peace Conference President Georges Clemenceau on the Subject of Peace Terms.” firstworldwar.com: a multimedia history of world war one. N.P. 22 August 2009. 2 Feburary 2010.

  18. Homework pasted on page 6 of notebook • Using your textbook (435 - 439) Create a timeline on a separate sheet of paper of the Russian Revolution • Use each date starting with “Bloody Sunday” 1905 and end with Stalin’s takeover in 1928 • 15 dates total • Four events in 1917 • Write a one sentence summary of each date

  19. Works Cited Textbook and Notebook Textbook: Beck, Roger B. et al. Modern World History: Patterns of Interaction. Sacramento: McDougal Littell, 2006. Print. Notebook: Goldbaum, Elana. “Title of Notes.” Gertz-Ressler High School. Los Angeles, CA. Day Month Year.

  20. Websites Last name of author, First name.“Title of Article.” Title of Website. Publisher of Website. Day Month Year published. Day Month Year accessed. • Use n.p. if there is no publisher • Use n.d. if there is no publishing date • EXAMPLE (no author available) • “Vladimir Lenin.” PBS.org. Microsoft Corporation. 2000. 2 March 2010.

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