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Writer’s Workshop

Writer’s Workshop . Group Improvements. Common Issues in you essays:. Smoothness of writing Subject matter Effectiveness of story Personal Reflection. Condensing your writing…. Your writing can almost always be more concise: Remove passive voice

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Writer’s Workshop

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  1. Writer’s Workshop Group Improvements

  2. Common Issues in you essays: • Smoothness of writing • Subject matter • Effectiveness of story • Personal Reflection

  3. Condensing your writing… • Your writing can almost always be more concise: • Remove passive voice • I had not been able to dive  I couldn’t dive • The lake was not the most enjoyable part of the trip for me  I detested the lake trip • Use more effective verbs/descriptors • One bad day that all of us in my family will remember  One infamous day • Only EXPLAIN what is absolutely necessary, DESCRIBE everything else • Cut down on the exposition of the story, a little goes a long way

  4. Sample essay: Version A vs. version b

  5. How to consolidate Version A Version B When we reached the pond where we would set up our home-away-from-home, I was already set to leave. • We actually had to walk into the pond where we would set up our home-away-from home. What a trek, it was terrible, and when we finally arrived, I was already set to leave.

  6. How to make the story more active Version A Version B Deer flies buzzed my head and sweat poured down my back. My backpack dug into my sides, and I was sure I had just heard rustlings that could only bode a visit from a ferocious bear my dad and I were headed into the back regions of swamps and raspberry bushes, at least a thousand miles from home and regular communication. Mud pulled at my sneakers, brambles cut my legs, and tree branches swatted my face. • One significant experience I had was when I camped out in the wilderness with my dad for two weeks last summer. That was a very buggy experience, but more than the left-over scars from branch wounds and brambles are left with me. I think I grew up on that trip.

  7. Make your reflection effective Version A Version B The day dad and I left the woods, we were still sweating and the deer flies were still biting, but I felt different. I grew up on that camping trip. I gained an inner sense of confidence and independence and I learned life is never the picture-perfect image you create in your head. There are wet sleeping bags, meals that have to be made, and relationships that don't always work. But, that's okay; I'll cope. • When dad and I left the woods, we were still sweating and the deer flies were still biting, but I felt different, I was stronger. And, that strength was something that came not only from knowing how to cook my own food, lug armfuls of wood three or four times a day, and make my own safe and cozy place in the world, no matter where. It came from an inner sense of seeing things as they are. Life isn’t just out of a magazine with the best appliances and the nicest furniture. There are other things in life, like dirty floors, and relationships that don’t always work, and meals that have to be made. But, that’s not all bad.

  8. Today’s Goals: • Conference with me! (This is your last chance in-class) • Edit & Revise

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