Taking Care of Goldy

1. Taking Care of Goldy Carl’s teacher asked the students in his class to write about something they enjoy. Carl decided to write about his fish, Goldy. He made this outline. Use it to answer the questions that follow. • Feed It • A. Once a day • Clean the Bowl • A. Put clean water in a clean bowl • B. Let water sit over night • Protect Goldy • A. Sprinkle two pinches of food 1 Which of these is in the wrong place on Carl’s chart? A Once a day B Put clean water in a clean bowl C Let water sit over night D Sprinkle two pinches of food 2Which of these could be added under Protect Goldy in Carl’s outline? F keep Tabby, the cat, out of my room G get new rocks for the bottom of the bowl H teach my friends about fish J ask dad for a hamster provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

2. Answer Sheet – For Teacher Use Notes to Teacher: Prewriting is anything that the writer does before writing a draft. It includes thinking, taking notes, talking to others, brainstorming, outlining, and gathering information. Prewriting will be assessed on the Standards of Learning English: Writing multiple-choice test. Students will be provided with webs, lists, story frames, or event frames. They will be asked to analyze the visuals and respond to questions. To be successful on this part of the test students must be able to focus on central topic and group related ideas. Students will be better prepared for this section of the writing assessment if they have participated in prewriting exercises prior to writing. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

3. Read the first part of Carl’s rough draft. Use it to answer the questions below. (1)When I went to visit grandma she took me to the city fair. (2)She let me play all kinds of games. (3)In one game you toss golf balls into fish bowls. (4)If the ball lands in the fishbowl you win a fish. (5)My golf ball landed in a fish bowl. (6)I won a fish! (7)I also won a raffle for a toy train once. (8)I never had a fish before. (9)I did not know what to do. 4 Which sentence should be removed because it does NOT develop the main idea of the paragraph? F She let me play all kinds of games. G In one game you toss golf balls into fish bowls. H I also won a raffle for a toy train once. J I never had a fish before. • How can sentence 6 be BEST written to include more detail? • A I won a cool fish! • B I won a shiny gold fish! • C I got a fish! • D I won a good fish! provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

4. Answer Sheet – For Teacher Use Notes to Teacher: During the revising stage of the writing process students will revise for focus, organization, specific vocabulary, specific information, and elaboration. To assist students in developing these skills direct instruction must take place on grouping like information into clear paragraphs, ordering paragraphs so there is a logical flow of information and including vivid vocabulary in their writing. Working with students to replace “tired” words in their writing with “lively” ones will boost their vocabulary. Writer’s workshop mini-lessons provide the perfect opportunity to model the use of “vivid vocabulary” and passage organization. The Standards of Learning writing assessments ask students to use their revising skills to identify ways to improve a passage that is provided. To be successful on this section of the assessment, students should be able to identify the intended audience, follow the organization of particular forms of writing and clarify writing when revising by including specific vocabulary and information. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

5. Read the second part of Carl’s rough draft. Use it to answer the questions below. (10)I had a lot to learn about taking care of a fish. (11)Fish are fragile pets. (12)They can get hurt easily the reason for this is that they are little. (13)They can also get sick. (14)They can even die if they are fed too much. (15)We went to the pet store to learn more about taking care of a fish. 5 After reading this section of his rough draft, Carl decides he needs to rewrite sentence 12. How is sentence 12 BEST written? A Fish are little so they can get hurt easily. B The reason for fish getting hurt easily is because they are little. C Little fish are the reason they get hurt easily. D They might get hurt easily the reason is because they are little. 6 Carl wants to rewrite sentence 15 to create a more vivid verbal picture. Which sentence is Carl’s BEST choice? F We got to the pet store to learn more about taking care of a fish. G We hurried to the pet store to learn more about taking care of a fish. H We go to the pet store to learn more about taking care of a fish. J We left to the pet store to learn more about taking care of a fish. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

6. Answer Sheet – For Teacher Use Notes to Teacher: During the revising stage of the writing process students will revise for focus, organization, specific vocabulary, specific information, and elaboration. To assist students in developing these skills direct instruction must take place on grouping like information into clear paragraphs, ordering paragraphs so there is a logical flow of information and including vivid vocabulary in their writing. Working with students to replace “tired” words in their writing with “lively” ones will boost their vocabulary. Writer’s workshop mini-lessons provide the perfect opportunity to model the use of “vivid vocabulary” and passage organization. The Standards of Learning writing assessments ask students to use their revising skills to identify ways to improve a passage that is provided. To be successful on this section of the assessment, students should be able to identify the intended audience, follow the organization of particular forms of writing and clarify writing when revising by including specific vocabulary and information. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

7. Read the third part of Carl’s rough draft. Use it to answer the questions below. (16)On the way, Grandma said I should give my new fish a name. (17)I named him Goldy. (18)Me and Grandma took Goldy with us to the pet store. (19)The fish expert at the pet store was named Mister Trout. (20)I learned a lot about taking care of Goldy from him. 7 How is Me and Grandma from sentence 18 BEST written? A Grandma and me B I and Grandma C Grandma and I D as it is 8 Another way to write Mister from sentence 19 is – F Mtr. G Mr. H Mstr. J Mrs. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

8. Answer Sheet – For Teacher Use Notes to Teacher: During the editing stage of the writing process students will edit for correct punctuation and sentence construction. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

9. Read the final part of Carl’s rough draft. Use it to answer the questions below. (21)Mr. Trout told me how to keep Goldys bowl clean and how to feed Goldy. (22)He also telled me that fish like to be talked to. (23)So I read books to Goldy everyday. (24)Taking care of a fish is hard work. (25)You need to keep their bowls clean, feed them and talk to them. 9 How is Goldys bowl from sentence 21 BEST written? A Goldy’s bowl B Goldys’ bowl C Goldy’s’ bowl D as it is • In sentence 22, He also telled me should be written – • F He also told me • G He also tell me • H He also telling me • J as it is provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.

10. Answer Sheet – For Teacher Use Notes to Teacher: During the editing stage of the writing process students will edit for correct punctuation and sentence construction. provided bySimply Achieve, Inc.