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Language Network. Elaboration. Elaboration. Elaboration. Elaboration is the addition of supporting details and explanations to develop a description, a narration, or an argument. Elaboration. Imagine that you would like to get a dog. Elaboration.
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Language Network Elaboration
Elaboration Elaboration Elaboration is the addition of supporting details and explanations to develop a description, a narration, or an argument.
Elaboration Imagine that you would like to get a dog.
Elaboration Here are two ads you might see in the local paper. Which ad is better? Why? DOGS FOR SALE Dog for sale. $150. Lucky Call 555-8652 FUN-LOVING Golden/Yellow Lab named Spot loves cats and children, plays catch. Spot is 1 1/2 years old, weighs 55 pounds, and is in good health. Shots current. $150.Call 555-3223.
Elaboration Types of Elaboration DOGS FOR SALE Dog for sale. $150 Lucky Call 555-8652 Facts and Statistics FUN-LOVING Golden/Yellow Lab named Spot loves cats and children, plays catch. Spot is 1 1/2 years old, weighs 55 pounds, and is in good health. Shots current. $150.Call 555-3223. Descriptive Details
Elaboration As you write and revise, remember to elaborate. Consider using...
Elaboration Elaboration Sensory Details Facts and Statistics Incidents or Anecdotes Specific Examples Quotations Visuals
Sensory Details Sensory details are bits of information you can collect through your five senses. Use details to enrich your descriptive and narrative writing.
SENSORY DETAILS LITERARY MODEL Sensory Details The black stove, stoked with coal and firewood, glows like a lighted pumpkin. Eggbeaters whirl, spoons spin round in bowls of butter and sugar, vanilla sweetens the air, ginger spices it; melting nose-tingling odors saturate the kitchen. . . . —Truman Capote, “A Christmas Memory”
Facts and Statistics Facts are statements that can be proved, and statistics are facts expressed as numbers. Use facts and statistics to support your opinions, arguments, and ideas.
FACTS AND STATISTICS STUDENT MODEL Facts and Statistics The Panama Canal is among the greatest engineering feats in the world. Begun in 1904, it took ten years to build. By 1913 more than 43,400 workers were employed on the canal. They had to drain swamps and cut through jungles. In all, 5,600 workers died from accidents or disease.
Incidents or Anecdotes Incidents or anecdotes are brief accounts of single events. Use them to round out your descriptions of people or events.
ANECDOTES PROFESSIONAL MODEL Incidents or Anecdotes Show business tradition holds that whatever happens, “the show must go on.” . . . Once flutist James Galway was performing in an outdoor concert at Ravinia, just north of Chicago. At one point in the show, when Galway opened his mouth to take a breath, a large bug flew into it. For a moment, he stopped playing and considered what he might do. Then realizing the show must go on, he took a great gulp and continued with his playing. —Bob Sheperd, “The Show Must Go On”
Specific Examples Use specific examplesto illustrate general statements or to show the characteristics of a group.
SPECIFIC EXAMPLE PROFESSIONAL MODEL Specific Examples The insurance industry has been burned recently by earthquakes, hurricanes, and tornadoes. Florida’s Hurricane Andrew alone bankrupted nine insurance companies. —John F. Ross, “Risk: Where Do Real Dangers Lie?”
Quotations Direct quotations are records of people’s exact words. Use quotations to illustrate ideas or to lend authority to your opinions.
QUOTATIONS STUDENT MODEL Quotations The author Ambrose Bierce knew how to put people in their place. In his humorous dictionary, he defined edible as “good to eat and wholesome to digest, as a worm to a toad, and a toad to a snake, a snake to a pig, a pig to a man, and a man to a worm.”
Visuals Use charts, graphs, and other visuals to present complex information more simply.
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1. Many problems, even serious world conflicts, have been solved without violence. Practice and Apply Use an example to elaborate the following sentence.
2. Although more women are working today than ever before, they still struggle for recognition and equal pay in the workplace. Practice and Apply Provide facts or statistics to support the following statement. To see statistics you can use, click here.
return to Practice and Apply Practice and Apply • In 1900, women made up about 18 percent of the work force. • In 1900, women were mostly employed in factories, on farms, and as servants. • In 1999, women made up about 47 percent of the work force. • Many women are underpaid and work in low-level jobs. • Women who have thrived in male-dominated businesses include Ann Fudge, a division president at Kraft Foods, and Muriel Siebert, the first woman to buy a seat on the New York Stock Exchange.
3. I had never been afraid of bugs. Practice and Apply Add an incident to the following story idea.
4. It was cool, so we made a campfire. Practice and Apply Add sensory details to the following statement.
5. Students in our class have strong opinions about homework. Practice and Apply Use a quotation to support the following essay topic.