Download
slide1 n.
Skip this Video
Loading SlideShow in 5 Seconds..
clarity PowerPoint Presentation

clarity

425 Vues Download Presentation
Télécharger la présentation

clarity

- - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - E N D - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - -
Presentation Transcript

  1. Stylistic editing for clarity

  2. Guideline 1

  3. Use shorter sentences Vary the length of your sentences

  4. One sentence, 53 words long.

  5. Three sentences, 15, 18 & 23 words long. Average length: 18.66 words.

  6. The hearing was planned for Monday, December 2, but not all of the witnesses could be available, so it was rescheduled for the following Friday, and then all the witnesses could attend. The hearing was planned for Monday, December 2. However, not all of the witnesses could be available, so it was rescheduled for the following Friday.

  7. The total quality of air (Cubic Feet of air per Minute or CFM) to be moved is governed by various local and state codes and if no local or state codes exist, the total quantity of air (CFM) to be exhausted from the hood shall be determined by one of the formulas that follow. The total quality of air (Cubic Feet of Air per Minute or CFM) to be moved is governed by various local and state codes. If no local or state codes exist, CFM to be exhausted from the hood shall be determined by one of the formulas that follow.

  8. Within these molecular techniques, the PCR-based methods have allowed species identification of yeast isolates, most of them accomplishing with the criteria of rapidity and simplicity. Most PCR-based methods have identifiedyeast isolates quickly and easily.

  9. Guideline 2 Use the active voice

  10. Never use the passive where you can use the active

  11. Never use the passive where you can use the active

  12. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  13. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  14. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  15. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  16. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  17. Many famous scientists have used the first person

  18. Passives The faulty valve was quickly found by the emergency maintenance crew. The emergency maintenance crew quickly found the faulty valve.

  19. Passives The voltage across the circuit was measured by assembly personnel at three different points. Assembly personnel measured the voltage across the circuit at three different points.

  20. Passives We have been asked by your home insurers to obtain your written confirmation that all their requirements have been completed by yourself. Your home insurers have asked us to obtain your written confirmation that you have completed all their requirements.

  21. Passives The fact that such processes are under strict stereoelectronic control is demonstrated by our work in this area. Our work in this area shows that such processes are under strict stereoelectronic control.

  22. Passives The results of the experiments carried out by Jones and Morgan into the subcloning of genes into M13 derivatives are discussed in this paper. In this paper we discuss the results of Jones and Morgan’s experiments into the subcloning of genes into M13 derivatives.

  23. Passives In our methodology, in which only one analyte is considered, it is proposed to evaluate s as the standard deviation of the straight line in the NASRP. Our method, which considers only one analyte, evaluates s as the standard deviation of the straight line in the NASRP.

  24. Passives Mechanistic data to explain our findings were not provided by this study. This study provided no mechanistic data to explain our findings.

  25. Passives Genetic contribution to the pathogenesis of schizophrenia has been demonstrated by clinical studies. Clinical studies have shown the genetic contribution to the pathogenesis of schizophrenia.

  26. Passives Genetic contribution to the pathogenesis of schizophrenia has been demonstrated by clinical studies. Clinical studies have shown that genes contribute to the pathogenesis of schizophrenia.

  27. Passives A new process for eliminating nitrogen oxides from diesel exhaust engines is presented. Flow tube experiments to test this process are discussed. The percentage decrease in nitrogen oxide emissions is revealed. We present a new process for eliminating nitrogen oxides from diesel exhaust engines, discuss flow tube experiments to test this process and reveal the percentage decrease in nitrogen oxide emissions. 

  28. Passives It has been requested that the samples taken at five different points on the river be retested for PCBs. We have received requests for the samples taken at five different points on the river to be retested for PCBs.

  29. Guideline 3 Use vigorous verbs

  30. Nouns, especially abstract nouns, are weak N

  31. Verbs, on the other hand, are strong. V

  32. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  33. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  34. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  35. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  36. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  37. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  38. N The use of carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for the production of activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may provide a contribution to cost reduction through process integration.

  39. V Using carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for producing activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may help reduce costs through process integration.

  40. V Using carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for producing activated carbons is an attractive strategy that may help reduce costs through process integration.

  41. V Using carbonaceous residues and by-products from existing industrial processes as feedstock for producing activated carbons may help reduce costs through process integration.

  42. Nominalizations Performance of the new stabilizer was far better than that of past designs. The new stabilizer performed far better than past designs.

  43. Nominalizations Stabilization of the compound took place early in the experiment. The compound stabilized early in the experiment.

  44. Nominalizations The milling of the three steel bases was done in the new computerized machining center. The three steel bases were milled in the new computerized machining center. We milled the three steel bases in the new computerized machining center.

  45. Nominalizations Evaporation of the fuel will take place in a matter of seconds. The fuel will evaporate in seconds.

  46. Nominalizations The method established is characterized for its simplicity and sensitivity. This method is both simple and sensitive.