SQUADS

1. CPW Learning Intentions - Today, I am going to address these College Readiness Standards in English: Conventions of Punctuation 13-15, 16-19 Topic Development in Terms of Purpose and Focus 24-27 Conventions of Usage 16-19, 20-23, 28-32 Organization, Unity, and Coherence 16-19 Word Choice in Terms of Style, Tone, Clarity, and Economy 20-23, 28-32 SQUADS “11th Grade English” Success Criteria – I will I am successful if I can identify the best use of punctuation, usage, word choice, organization, and topic development.

2. 1. Answer: A • 1. Furthermore, the student offered no evidence to back up his claim that longer lunch periods would provide renewed energy later in the day. • A. NO CHANGE • Rationale: The claim is not which, in which, or where because it’s not logical in respect to talking about the claim “that longer lunch periods would provide renewed energy later in the day.” •  Conventions of Usage 16-19

3. 2. Answer: C 2. Her challenge initiated a review, of workers’ rights and administrative responsibility in the public workforce. A. NO CHANGE B. review, of workers’ rights, C. review of workers’ rights D. review of workers’ rights, Rationale: Delete commas that create basic sense problems. The comma after review doesn’t make sense and creates a pause that is incorrect. Letters B and D are incorrect because the phrase “workers’ rights and administrative responsibility” belong together. No comma is needed. Conventions of Punctuation 13-15

4. 3. Answer: D 3. Though the two friends since childhood remained cordial, their friendship was damaged due to the fact that they had the disagreement. A. NO CHANGE B. because of the fact that they had a C. due to the fact of their D. by the Rationale: Correct vague and wordy or clumsy and confusing writing containing sophisticated language. The underlined phrase is attempting to be sophisticated but creates a wordy sentence. Letters B and C both sound like an attempt to be scientific, whereas letter D is clear and to the point. Word Choice in Terms of Style, Tone, Clarity, and Economy 28-32

5. 4. Answer: B 4. Other letters are solemn, speaking of relatives and friends whom had died. A.NO CHANGE B. who C. who they D. of whom Rationale: In this case, letters C (who they) and D (of whom) can be ruled out simply because they don’t make much sense. It’s either whom or who. “Who” is subjective while “whom” is in the objective case. The technique of substituting the personal pronoun “he” (subjective) or “him” (objective) works nicely whenever you have difficulty deciding whether to use who or whom. If “he” makes more sense, then use who. If “him” makes more sense, use whom. “He/Him” had died. He had died=Who Conventions of Usage 28-32

6. 5. Answer: A 5. At one point, Jose sent a draft of his poem“Welcome to Paradise” to his English teacher, who praised the poem but suggested revisions. As a result, Jose wrote two other versions of the introduction. A. NO CHANGE B. rewrote two other alternate C. rewrote two additional alternate D. wrote two alternate revised Rationale: Delete redundant material when information is repeated in different parts of speech (e.g. alarmingly startled). Letters B, C, and D are all redundant because rewrote, other, alternate, additional, and revised repeat the same information.  Word Choice 20-23

7. 6. Answer: B 6. Last year’s essays – many over 1,500 words in length – shows the breadth and depth of students’ connection to the text. A. NO CHANGE B. show C. will of showed D. would of showed Rationale: Ensure that a verb agrees with its subject when there is some text between the two. The phrase “many over 1,500 words in length” between the dashes is extra information that comes between the subject “essays” and the verb “shows.” The subject and verb need to agree, even if the phrases between the two make the verb sound right. It should read: Last year’s essays show the breadth and depth… Letter C and D are incorrect because they are in the wrong tense and mistakenly use “of” instead of “have.” Usage 20-23

8. 7. Answer: A • 7. Although her physical contact with the world was limited by caring for her invalid mother and by her own poor health, Smith’s correspondence was extensive: over one thousand letters to upwards of one hundred correspondents. A. NO CHANGE B. extensive, and over C. extensive; over D. extensive. Over Rationale: Use a colon to introduce an example or an elaboration. Letter B is incorrect because the use of “and” means there is an additional idea, but the idea the follows is an example of the extensive correspondence. Letter C and D are incorrect because semicolons can only connect two closely related complete ideas with a subject and a verb and the idea can’t stand alone. “Over one thousand letters to upwards of one hundred correspondents” is not a sentence. Conventions of Punctuation 33-36

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