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Marking Student Papers

Marking Student Papers. Ethical. The Vortex.

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Marking Student Papers

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  1. Marking Student Papers

  2. Ethical The Vortex Beep! Beep! Lyndsay cameto pick me up. We were going toKings Island. When we arrived atthe church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I could’nt waitfor what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited. On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M. How does this fit?

  3. Ethical When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, “I know I’m going toregret this.” The wind was blowingin my hair. I could’nt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to Good details!

  4. Ethical die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it was’nt helping. I’m surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.As we slowed down I startedbreathing again. When I got off I wasso dizzy I fell over. I wouldnever ride it again. The Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever.

  5. Ethical That day we had lotsof fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. It’s way to scary. You do the apostrophecorrectly here. Checkyour paper for others. You have good sentence variety with many complex sentences. Review pp. 64-67 in your grammar book or check your work from our mini-lesson on commas after introductory adverb clauses.

  6. Ethical The Vortex Beep! Beep! Lyndsay cameto pick me up. We were going toKings Island. When we arrived atthe church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I could’nt waitfor what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited. On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M. punctuationerror punctuationerror How does this fit?

  7. punctuationerror When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, “I know I’m going toregret this.” The wind was blowingin my hair. I could’nt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going todie. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming. Ethical punctuationerror punctuationerror punctuationerror punctuationerror

  8. punctuationerror/spelling Ethical But it was’nt helping. I’m surprized it could stop, it was going so fast. As we slowed down I started breathing again. When I got off I was so dizzyI fell over. I would never ride it again. The Vortex was very scary. It seemed like I rode it forever. That day we had lots of fun.We rode everything like the logs,the boat, and the bestie. I learned from the Vortex to never ride it again. It’s way to scary. punctuationerror cap/spelling usage You do the apostrophe correctly here. Check your paper for others.

  9. Ethical The Vortex Beep! Beep! Lyndsay cameto pick me up. We were going toKings Island. for what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited. On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M. When we arrived at the church we got our stuff and got on the bus. I couldn’t wait How does this fit?

  10. Ethical When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped me in. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, “I know I’m going toregret this.” The wind was blowingin my hair. I could’nt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to

  11. Ethical die. But it was’nt helping. I’m surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.never ride it again. The Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever. As we went through the loops I kept screaming and screaming. You do the apostrophe correctly here. Checkyour paper for others. As we slowed down I started breathing again. When I got off I was so dizzy I fell over. I would

  12. Ethical That day we had lotsof fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. It’s way to scary. You’ve done a good job proofreading, but you seem to be having a problem with commas after introductory elements and apostrophes in contractions. Read aloud the sentences I’ve highlighted. See where you have a natural pause to decide where to place the commas. Check pp. 64-67 in your grammar book if you need more help. Also, check 52-54 for apostrophe rules.

  13. C = capitalization U = usage P = punctuation S = spelling Ethical The Vortex Beep! Beep! Lyndsay cameto pick me up. We were going toKings Island. When we arrived atthe church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I could’nt waitfor what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited. On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M. P P How does this fit?

  14. Ethical When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, “I know I’m going toregret this.” The wind was blowingin my hair. I could’nt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to P P P Good details! P P

  15. Ethical die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it was’nt helping. I’m surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.As we slowed down I startedbreathing again. When I got off I wasso dizzy I fell over. I wouldnever ride it again. The Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever. c P P, S P P

  16. Ethical That day we had lotsof fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. It’s way to scary. C, S U

  17. Unethical The Vortex Beep! Beep! Lyndsay cameto pick me up. We were going toKings Island. When we arrived atthe church we got our stuff andgot on the bus. I could’nt waitfor what was waiting when I gotthere. I was so excited. On the way there Lyndsayand I fell asleep. I guess wewere very tired because we gotup at 3:30 A.M. , ‘

  18. Unethical , When we arrived Lyndsayand I wanted to ride the Vortexfirst. As I stood in line I neverexpected it to be what it was.As I got on they strapped mein. Then it took off. I thoughtto myself, “I know I’m going toregret this.” The wind was blowingin my hair. I could’nt see athing. I loved it. Then the rollercoaster got faster and it gotscary. I thought I was going to , , ‘ ,

  19. Unethical die. As we went through theloops I kept screaming and screaming.But it was’nt helping. I’m surprizedit could stop, it was going so fast.As we slowed down I startedbreathing again. When I got off I wasso dizzy I fell over. I wouldnever ride it again. The Vortexwas very scary. It seemed likeI rode it forever. , ‘ surprised , ,

  20. Unethical That day we had lotsof fun. We rode everything likethe logs, the boat, and the bestie.I learned from the Vortex tonever ride it again. It’s way to scary. Beastie too

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