Literacy Autobiography Peer Review

1. Literacy Autobiography Peer Review Thursday 7/10

2. What is Peer Review? • Peer’s reviewing • Giving tips on writing • Different perspective on writing • Collaboration: working together to improve • See other people’s papers

3. What’s your experience with Peer Review? • Good • Opinion, catch errors • Provide help expanding on ideas • Eliminate unnecessary language (FLUFF/BS) • Comparison • Bad • People aren’t tough enough • Problems of expertise • People focus on grammar (when not appropriate)

4. What is the perfect peer review? • Straight shooter (tell you how it is, blunt) • Nice, cordial, professional • Let you know what you are doing well& what you can improve on • Knows what they are talking about

5. What generally happens • Most comments focus on grammar & language • Peer Review deals with rough drafts, and lots can change. • Language & Grammar are worth the least on the rubrics. • Many comments were superficial. • I am glad that you like parts of your peers papers, but why? Help them do it again.

6. Example Grammar Comments • “I think that you need to check your grammar. For example, Because I had a chance to see Roy Jones Jr’s match. You have conjunction and you need one more sentence.” • “Make sure your words are in order. ex. I have really trouble with rhythmical sense. instead say ‘Ireally have trouble with rythmical sense.’ ”

7. Example Superficial Comments • “I liked the amount of detail that you put into describing the literacy and found it very interesting.” • “I like how you said softball is your language.” • “It flowed very well.”

8. Brainstorm • How can we give better comments?

9. MAPS • M • A • P • S

10. MAPS • Mode • Genre that piece of writing is composed. Certain genres have features that could effect the writing. • A • P • S

11. MAPS • M • Audience • Who is this paper being written to? • P • S

12. MAPS • M • A • Purpose • Why is this paper being written? • S

13. MAPS • M • A • P • Situation • 1) The situation of the writing • 2) The situation of the writer

14. What a good comment should do • A good comment provides context • I see that you started the second paragraph by doing “x.” • A good comment assesses. • I think using an example was a good idea. • A good comment offers advice. • I think you need to have more context, maybe you should start by introducing the topic first.

15. Put it all together… • “In your second paragraph I see that you decided to start it with an example.I think that this is a little confusing. It might be easier for your reading to understand your topic if you introduce the idea first. For example you could say, “Ever since I was a kid I loved baseball.” • Step further: You can point to examples in the paper where the writer did the same thing successfully.

16. Some comments I liked • “In the third paragraph you could expand on how the Chamber Singers inspired you to join that group, and the process you took to get in.” • Your fourth paragraph has a much different tone than the rest of the paper. The words come across as less formal and more passionate. Setting the tone of the paper to match the tone of the fourth paragraph will add more interest and energy.

17. Extended Look • During my choir class one day in sixth grade, high school students from Stoney Creek came over to talk to us about the five different choirs offered in high school, and about the highest choir, which was the most desired choir to be a part of, Chamber Singers. From that day forward, I aspired to be a member of that elite group. By the time senior year of high school came around, I got accepted into Chamber Singers. It was one of the most beneficial, helpful, meaningful groups I have ever been in. Being a part of Chamber Singers has helped me learn in new ways with both school and the world.

18. Extended Look • “In the third paragraph you could expand on how the Chamber Singers inspired you to join that group, and the process you took to get in.” • What makes this helpful?

19. So for the future