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Developing a Thesis Statement: Examples

Developing a Thesis Statement: Examples. Example One. First attempt: The environment matches Roderick Usher’s internal mood. Comments: The student needs to be more precise, add a layer of sophistication, and embrace more complexity in stating the central claim. Second attempt:

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Developing a Thesis Statement: Examples

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  1. Developing a Thesis Statement: Examples

  2. Example One First attempt: The environment matches Roderick Usher’s internal mood. Comments: The student needs to be more precise, add a layer of sophistication, and embrace more complexity in stating the central claim.

  3. Second attempt: The oppressive, saturnine external atmosphere is a physical representation of Roderick Usher’s internal oppression of self—his identity as an Usher and the legacy of the Ushers. Comments: This attempt shows improvement, but it still lacks clarity.

  4. Third attempt: The oppressive and saturnine external atmosphere represents Roderick Usher’s internal oppression of self, of his identity as an Usher and of the family legacy. The Ushers’ stagnation—their family line—has been represented by the claustrophobic environment of the house and the atmosphere surrounding it. His suffering is a result of external and internal entrapment. Comments: A fine thesis idea, but sentence structure and diction need some reworking. Nevertheless, it will serve as a fine organizing principle for a literary analysis essay.

  5. Example Two First attempt: The tarn is a mirror that distorts reality. Comments: Incomplete thesis; it needs to be anchored in the story more precisely.

  6. Second attempt: The double imagery Poe offers us in the story is exemplified in the tarn. This symbol is given us to suggest the story is a dream. Comments: This attempt still lacks clarity. The ideas are interesting, but they are colliding into each other. The articulation is not coherent yet.

  7. Third attempt: Double imagery makes us look twice—everything in this story is not as it appears. The tarn is the source of this idea, as it is the initial image of reflection, of distortion, that sets the reader questioning what follows in the story as dream or reality. Comments: This attempt needs work in terms of clarity, but it has improved in complexity and coherence. Sentence structure needs better flow, but the organization of ideas is fine.

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