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Revise for Word Clarity and Choice. Objective: To clarify the meaning and feeling of your poems by incorporating strong verbs, using imaginative and descriptive vocabulary and eliminating words that are overused or unnecessary. Focusing Question:
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Revise for Word Clarity and Choice • Objective: • To clarify the meaning and feeling of your poems by incorporating strong verbs, using imaginative and descriptive vocabulary and eliminating words that are overused or unnecessary. • Focusing Question: • How and why do you revise your poems for word clarity and choice? http://www.writingmatters.org Focusing Question | Mini Lesson | Writer’s Work Time | Lesson Summary
Mini LessonBeginner Tired or worn words like “great” or nice” do not convey meaning. Vivid or strong verbs help paint an image for the reader. The Pencil Sharpener By Georgia Heard The pencil sharpener makes the pencil into a sharp point and spits the leftovers out. • What words can you use to replace “makes” in this poem? • What words could you use to replace “leaves”? Use Word Choice (Handout 3.2a) Focusing Question | Mini Lesson | Writer’s Work Time | Lesson Summary
Mini LessonIntermediate and Experienced Tired or worn words like “great” or nice” do not convey meaning. Vivid or strong verbs help paint an image for the reader. April Rain Song by Langston Hughes Let the rain kiss you Let the rain _______ your head with _______drops Let the rain sing a _______ The rain makes ________ on the sidewalk The rain makes _______ in the gutter The rain plays _________ ________on our roof at night And I love the rain. When You Come by Maya Angelou When you come to me, unbidden, Beckoning me To ______ rooms, Where memories lie. Offering me, as to a child, an attic, Gatherings of days too few. Baubles of stolen kisses Trinkets of _______ _________. Trunks of What words can you use to give the poem meaning?
Writer’s Work Time • Go to Step 3 of the Online Classroom. • Watch DD and JT’s Think Aloud, Word Clarity. • Download your document from the activity Submit Your Revised Poems. • Resave your document with a new name on the computer’s desktop. • Select a poem to revise for word choice. Use vivid/strong verbs, replace tired words and remove unnecessary words like “and” and “the.” • Revise your other poems following the same steps. Be careful not to change the syllable count of a haiku. • Resave your revised poems and submit again to the Step 3 of the Online Classroom activity Submit Your Revised Poems. Focusing Question | Mini Lesson | Writer’s Work Time | Lesson Summary
Lesson Summary • How and why do you revise your poems for word clarity and choice? • Read a classmate’s poem before and after he or she revised it. Think about: • How did the author use descriptive and/or interesting language? • How did the author’s revisions influence the meaning of the poem? Focusing Question | Mini Lesson | Writer’s Work Time | Lesson Summary