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Show!. Don’t Tell!. Show, Don’t Tell How to add vivid details to your writing

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  1. Show! Don’t Tell!

  2. Show, Don’t Tell How to add vivid details to your writing Background: The Sensory/Descriptive domain of writing is that area, which deals with the vivid description and feeling the writer, uses in creating setting, characters, and action. Show, Not Tell is a technique developed by RebekahKaplan to help students write so that they are able to create a picture in the reader's mind, to get away from the repetition of such empty words as weird, really neat, beautiful, wonderful, and b-o-r-i-n-g.

  3. Telling It was July 10th. I went to the football game around 5:00PM and I was the running back for my team. During the 4th quarter of the game the quarterback tossed me the ball and as I tried to make a run for it I was hit by a defensive player and I broke my arm. My parents rushed me to the hospital and they gave me an x-ray and a cast. I had to wear the cast for 5 weeks.

  4. Showing My face was two inches from the enormous linebacker crouching in front of me. The July heat was causing droplets of salty sweat to drip down his face, off his nose, and onto the ground. I could feel and hear his low roaring breaths as he intensely stared into my eyes while trying to figure out my next move. This man meant business. "Blue 42! Blue 42! Set! Set! HUT HUT! HIKE!" the quarter back yelled. In a split second everyone on the line moved in unison, like a slow motion moving train colliding into another. I move to my right and catch the slant pass thrown by the quarterback and spin to break away from my defender. I had just gained possession of the ball...one foot down, then the other...as I dug my heels into the ground and prepared my body to slingshot down the field I was sideswiped by the enormous linebacker who was looking out for me the whole time. As he slammed his shoulder into my body I was bent in half and thrown in the air. Woooooshhh went my breath right out of my body. As I was on my way down all I was thinking was "Do NOT drop the football; we can't afford a fumble." I looked to my fate as I neared the grassy field with my arms facing downward. Its only a matter of milliseconds...3...2...1...SNAP! The snap was the only sound I could hear radiating throughout my entire body.

  5. Telling Roller coasters scare me. I do not like heights. I went on one called "The Grizzly" at Kingsdominion last week and it was horrifying.

  6. Showing "Click clickclickclickclickclick..." is the sound I hear as I ascend up this death trap of fear. How did I let Sara talk me into riding this with her? Nothing about this is enjoyable for me; nothing about the flipping, nauseated stomach, the impending doom of dropping hundreds of feet, the pounding heart in my chest that I swear may stop at any moment...none of this is fun for me. Everyone always says roller coasters are safe, but the feeling of having my body twisted, turned, and thrown around for 2 minutes while having absolutely no control over the fate of my life is not something I consider safe. "Click clickclickclick..." I try not to look but I peer over the side of my seat and see the trees getting smaller and the other roller coasters looking shorter and the people looking like ants...OH MY GOODNESS GET ME OFF OF HERE!!! I can't see over the peak of the drop but we are almost to the top...CLICK CLICKCLICK...AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!

  7. Telling: The pizza was delicious. Showing: Steam rising up off the melted cheese made my mouth water. The first bite, my teeth sinking into thecheese through the tomato sauce and into the moist crust, made me chew and swallow rapidly. Even the cheese andtomato sauce, sticking to my fingertips, begged to be licked.

  8. Telling: The girls were excited. Showing: Giggles and screams filled the arena. The soft curls were now damp with perspiration and the anticipation of the event. They held tight to each other in a mock effort to contain themselves. Arms flailed upward, and voices echoed in varying tones. The moment was here.

  9. Telling: The room was vacant. Showing: The door opened with a resounding echo that seemed to fill the house. Cob webs once attached flowed freely in the air as the open door brought light to a well worn floor. The light gave notice to the peeling paint on the walls and to the silhouettes once covered by pictures. The new air gave life to a stuffiness that entrapped the room.Faded and torn white sheets covered once new furniture now drowning in dust.

  10. Converting telling writing to showing writing: from sentences to paragraphs and beyond. Choose TWO telling sentences from below and expand to a showing paragraph or other short genre of writing. I am nervous. It was a day unlike any other day. The story was exciting. The hamburger (taco, burrito, etc) was delicious. (any type of food). John/Mary is angry. The morning was beautiful. My room is a mess. The movie was filled with action.

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