THE HAPPY RAINBOW FUN-TIME REVISION SLIDE SHOW

1. THE HAPPY RAINBOW FUN-TIME REVISION SLIDE SHOW BADDA-BING

2. 1 Bannister Matz DiCredico Gorman Malinchock Padilla Taskin 2 Brunnquell Ross Dilatush Keswa McMullen Peltekis PERIOD 1 3 Godshall Aptekar Dziekonski Khosa McQuillen Sheung 4 Mann Abrahamson Goldstein Kothe Mulholland Tarasiuk

3. 1 Carlson Miller Gong Lyon Rosario PERIOD 2 2 Goldstein Sinesi Kirschner, J. McLaughlin-McMannis 3 Kirschner, A Wolf Talbot Pannepacker Schmidt 4 Kruse Zingarini Garven Richards Rothstein

4. 1 ABRAMS DEARDEN ESPLIN KOGAN PECK VILLANTE PERIOD 6/7 2 COHEN DIENSTMAN FELS KUIKEN McKESSEY SINGH 3 DEVITT KELLER HARTLEY LEDBETTER REDNOR WANG 4 DURKIN LAGUNTINA KIRKPATRICK MANGANO SELVAN WONG

5. 1 BALAJI MORRISON RABINOWITZ BARRY EICK MICCIOLO PERIOD 9 2 CAREY NORDEN RUBINO CAMPBELL FOOTE O’BRIEN 3 COHEN OLIVARI STRESS CARDUCCI MARQUES PIETROWSKI NORDVEIT 4 KANER PRICE ZAVODNICK CREW McLAUGHLIN SOYKA

6. GREEN = GO FOR IT!Excellent Critical Writing With Researched, Well-Reasoned Arguments • Uses original ideas (doesn’t let the critic take the lead) • Uses Text {PROOF} from the short story in their arguments. Expands and analyzes that {proof} often. • Frames all quotes from critics. • Uses present tense when criticizing literature.

7. Yellow = Slow Down and ReviseUnbalanced, Unproven Arguments With Possible Faulty Reasoning. • Allows the critics to lead at times. • Needs more detailed Text {PROOF} from the short story. • Needs to cite author in detail. • Needs to cite author and page number when paraphrasing. • An alarming number of grammatical and formatting errors.

8. Red = Stop and Rethink. Inadequate Evidence and/or Failed Reason • The critics take the lead. Article is basically a summary of what critics think, rather than an original literary research article. • Little to no actual textual {PROOF} to back up arguments. • Appears rushed and unclear often. • Contains multiple typos and mechanical errors.

9. CONCISE • MAKE “TO BE” YOUR ENEMY. • “IS” “ARE” “WAS” “WERE” • WRITING BECOMES CLEARER • LESS PASSIVE VOICE (PV)

10. CONCISE The plot of the story is based almost entirely on a group of three young girls that enter the store. [20 words]

11. CONCISE The plot follows a group of three young girls who enter the store. [13 words]

12. [FRAMES] • Make it clear if a critic or the author is writing the quote. • Make you sound clearer and prepared for your reader.

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20. TEXT {PROOF} • Increases your LOGOS • Makes your argument more convincing • Makes it clear that you KNOW the story and you KNOW your stuff!

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27. PARAPHRASE Helps your reader follow the important action. Cites the AUTHOR’s last name, not the critic’s. Cites the PAGE NUMBER also. EX: (London 7). Keeps you from sounding pretentious Effective use of Conciseness (C)

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30. INTRO HOOK • Helps your reader engage the material. • Uses a plausible connection. • Author quote • Metaphor • Comparison

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