JCM210B TECHNIQUES FOR ENGLISH NEWS WRITING & REPORTING II

1. JCM210B TECHNIQUES FOR ENGLISH NEWS WRITING & REPORTING II Group5 Zheng Jing Jing 201014008H (No. 5) Lou WaiPeng 201014059 Ho Ka Chun 201114120E To chin ming 201014132E Property boss held over sex assault

2. Theme：Crime - sex assault • Byline：Anita Lam, Clifford Lo • Source：South China Morning Post • Date：2012-09-01 • Total words: 486 • Headline • Property boss held over sex assault • Omitting the “was”

3. Lead (6-wh elements) • Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile (who) is arrested (what) over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee(why) at his luxury home in Happy Valley. (where) • WHO: Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile; A 28-year-old female employee • WHAT: be arrested • WHY: over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee • WHERE: his luxury home in Happy Valley

4. Immediate identification lead • Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile, is arrested over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury home in Happy Valley. • The subjects which is principal used on the front and an occupation is used after the name. • Chen Zhoulin as chairman of Agile Property Holdings is a famous person . • It can attract people’s attentions.

5. Reports of events and opinions Report of events (1)Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile, is arrested over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury home in Happy Valley. (2)The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley, the company said yesterday. (3)Agile stressed the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm. (4)Chen Zhuolin,50, was arrested on Thursday when he went to Wan Chai police station to answer inquiries over an alleged indecent assault at his home on PurvesRoadon July 10. (5) While the group‘s share price closed 4.61 per cent lower at HK$8.90 yesterday.(Report of event) analysts said Chen’s arrested was unlikely to affect the group‘s ventures - especially its plan to bid for more land plots in Yunnan.(Report of opinions) Report of events Report of opinions Report of events transition Report of events and opinions

6. transition Report of events (6)According to a police officer, the assault took place shortly before midnight on July 10 when Chen and the alleged victim held a reception for mainland clients at his house. After the clients left, she was asked to stay and sing karaoke with him. "The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted," the police source said. (7)He said the victim did not report the attack that night. She discussed the alleged incident with colleagues before she went to Happy Valley police station and reported the case on July 14. (8)Chen was granted police bail but is required to report back next month. No charge has been laid. Report of events Report of events transition (9)While the family trust of Chen and his wife, FionLuk Sin-fong, owned a 63.58 per cent stake in the company, analysts believe the incident is unlikely to lead to any big change in the companies' share structure or its ambition to develop tourism-related real estate on the mainland. Report of opinions

7. Report of opinions (10)"The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm. But he expects the company's share price to be under pressure in the near future, as some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation. (11)Chen and his wife co-founded the company 20 years ago. Agile Garden in Zhongshan, one of its early key projects, was a big hit and once made up 70 per cent of the city's total property sales. The company entered the Guangzhou market in 2002 and set a record by launching four property developments in one year. The company went public in Hong Kong in 2006. (12)Last year, Forbes ranked Chen and his family in 75th place on a list of China's 400 richest, with wealth of US$1.34 billion. In July, a local rich list published by Money Week magazine named Chen and his family the ninth richest in China. Report of events

8. Structure : Quotes and AttributionsDirect Quote Para 3 • Agile stressed the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the Hong Kong-listed firm. " Attribution: Agile --the spokesman of Agile Property Holdings Quotation Reporting verb AQ form

9. Direct Quote Para 10 Quotation "The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm. Reporting verb Attribution: An analyst from a Japan-based securities firm QA form

10. Indirect Quote Para 2 Quotation The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley, the company saidyesterday. Attribution: the company Reporting verb QA format

11. Indirect Quote Para 5 Quotation Attribution: Analysts Reporting verb Analysts said Chen's arrested was unlikely to affect the group's ventures - especially its plan to bid for more land plots in Yunnan . Para 7 Quotation Attribution: He(The police source) Reporting verb He(The police source) said the victim did not report the attack that night. AQ format

12. Indirect Quote Para 9 Quotation Attribution: Analysts analystsbelievethe incident is unlikely to lead to any big change in the companies' share structure or its ambition to develop tourism-related real estate on the mainland. Reporting verb AQ format

13. Direct Quote Indirect Quote Para 6 Para 6 Quotation Quotation Attribution: The victim Reporting verb "The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted," the police source said. The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted,….. Reporting verb Attribution: the police source QA form AQ format

14. Language use Active Voice - Present tense Active Voice - Past Tense Passive Voice – Present tense Passive Voice – Past Tense Active voice - Future Tense Term of the main characters Adjective Compound adjective Use of conjunctions Use of modal verbs Present Participles Past Participles Gerunds Relative clause Subjective Personal Pronouns Objective Personal Pronouns Possessive Personal Pronouns

15. Tense and Voice

16. Active voice • Active voice is the voice used to indicate that the subject of the sentence is performing the action or causing the action.

17. Passive voice Why Passive voice is very useful in news writing? • Passive voice can emphasize the object when the subject is either unknown or unimportant • When reporter do not sure subject it can avoid slander

18. Active Voice - Present tense Facts or Generalizations : Simple present Actions at the present time . • Para 3:Agile stressed the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm. • Para9:While the family trust of Chen and his wife, Fion Luk Sin-fong,owned a 63.58 per cent stake in the company, analysts believe the incident is unlikely to lead to any bigchange in the companies’ share structure or its ambition to develop tourism-related real estate on the mainland.

19. Active Voice - Present tense • Para 10: "The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm. But he expects the company's share price to be under pressure in the near future, as some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation.

20. Passive Voice – Present tense • Simple present tense • Para 1(Lead) : Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile, is arrested over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury home in Happy Valley. (Chen Zhuolin as a key person can be stressed) • But he expects the company's share price to be under pressure in the near future, as some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation.

21. Passive Voice – Present tense present perfect tense • an action happened at an unspecified time before now • Para 8: Chen was granted police bail but is required to report back next month. No charge has been laid. • Para10: The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm.

22. Active Voice - Past Tense Simple past tense • Indicating an action happens at a specific time in the past • Para2:The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley, the company saidyesterday. • Para3:Agile stressed the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm. • Para4:Chen Zhuolin,50, was arrested on Thursday when he went to Wan Chai police station to answer inquiries over an alleged indecent assault at his home on PurvesRoadonJuly 10.

23. Active Voice – Past tense • Para5: While the group's share price closed 4.61 per cent lower at HK$8.90yesterday, analysts said Chen's arrest was unlikely to affect the group's ventures –especially its plan to bid for more land plots in Yunnan. • Para6:According to a police officer, the assault took place shortly before midnight on July 10 when Chen and the alleged victim held a reception for mainland clients at his house. After the clients left, she was asked to stay and sing karaoke with him. "The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted," the police source said. • Para7:He said the victim did not report the attack that night. She discussed the alleged incident with colleagues before she went to Happy Valley police station and reported the case onJuly 14.

24. Active Voice – Past tense • Para9: While the family trust of Chen and his wife, Fion Luk Sin-fong, owned a 63.58 per cent stake in the company….. • Para10: The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm. • Para11: Chen and his wife co-founded the company 20 years ago. Agile Garden in Zhongshan , one of its early key projects, was a big hit and once made up 70 per cent of the city's total property sales. The company entered the Guangzhou market in 2002 and set a record by launching four property developments in one year. The company went public in Hong Kong in 2006.

25. Active Voice – Past tense • Para12: Last year, Forbes ranked Chen and his family in 75th place on a list of China's 400 richest, with wealth of US$1.34 billion. In July, a local rich list published by Money Week magazine named Chen and his family the ninth richest in China.

26. Passive Voice – Past Tense • Para2: The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley, the company said yesterday. • Para 4: Chen Zhuolin,50, was arrested on Thursday when he went to Wan Chai police station to answer inquiries over an alleged indecent assault at his home on PurvesRoadon July 10. • Chen was arrested by police officer in the past

27. Passive Voice – Past Tense • Para6: …..After the clients left, she was asked to stay and sing karaoke with him."The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted," the police source said. (The assault happened on July 10,2012) • Para8: Chen was granted police bail but is required to report back next month. • ( in this sentence, the character is an important information. So Chen acts as the subject, using the passive voice.)

28. Passive Voice – Past Tense • Para12: Last year, Forbesranked Chen and his family in 75th place on a list of China's 400 richest, with wealth of US$1.34 billion. In July, a local rich list publishedby Money Week magazinenamed Chen and his family the ninth richest in China. ( a local rich list was published by Money Week magazine)

29. Active voice - Future Tense Expressing a prediction: • Para 3: Agile stressed the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm.

30. Adjective Compound adjective • consists of 2 or more words  but express a single thought • modify adjective phrases and clauses Normally similar to adjectives Noun + adjective (EXAMPLE: tax-exempt)Noun + participle (EXAMPLE: government-owned)Adjective + participle (EXAMPLE: friendly-looking)

31. Example in the news • Para2: A 28-year-old famale employee • Para3: Hong Kong-listed • Para10: A Japan-based securities firm

32. Use of conjunctions • Using a conjunction to link words, phrases, and clause • (Para 3) Agile stressed the incident "has not and(linking two predicate verbs) will not affect the normal business and (linking two nouns –object) operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm. • (Para 4)Chen Zhuolin,50, was arrested on Thursday when (linking two independent clauses) he went to Wan Chai police station to answer inquiries over an alleged indecent assault at his home on PurvesRoadon July 10.

33. Use of conjunctions • (Para 5) While (introducing the dependent clause ) the group's share price closed 4.61 per cent lower at HK$8.90 yesterday, analysts said Chen's arrest was unlikely to affect the group's ventures - especially its plan to bid for more land plots in Yunnan . • (Para 6) According to a police officer, the assault took place shortly before (linking phrases of time, indicating time of the crime )midnight on July 10 when (linking two independent clauses) Chen and (linking two nouns- subject)the alleged victim held a reception for mainland clients at his house. After (introducing the dependent clause ) the clients left, she was asked to stay and (linking two object of the verb “ask”) sing karaoke with him. "The victim claimed she was molested while (linking two independent clauses , this clause omits “she was”)singing in a karaoke room and(linking two independent clauses) she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted," the police source said.

34. Use of conjunctions • (Para 7) He said the victim did not report the attack that night. She discussed the alleged incident with colleagues before (linking two independent clauses) she went to Happy Valley police station and (linking two predicate verbs)reported the case on July 14. • (Para 8) Chen was granted police bail but (linking two independent clauses, this sentence omits the subject-Chen)is required to report back next month. No charge has been laid. • (Para 9) While (introducing the dependent clause ) the family trust of Chen and his wife, FionLuk Sin-fong, owned a 63.58 per cent stake in the company, analysts believe the incident is unlikely to lead to any big change in the companies' share structure or (linking two nouns phrases, describing the places of changing)its ambition to develop tourism-related real estate on the mainland.

35. Use of conjunctions • (Para 10) "The company has been listed for (indicating length of time )so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen andhis wife (linking two persons, “between Chen and his wife ” describes the conflict) could alter the company's future direction," said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm. But (expression the transition) he expects the company's share price to be under pressure in the near future, as (expression the reason) some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation. • (Para 11) Chen and(linking two nouns- subject) his wife co-founded the company 20 years ago. Agile Garden in Zhongshan , one of its early key projects, was a big hit and(linking two predicate verbs) once made up 70 per cent of the city's total property sales. The company entered the Guangzhou market in 2002 and(linking two predicate verbs) set a record by launching four property developments in one year. The company went public in Hong Kong in 2006.

36. Use of conjunctions • (Para 12) Last year, Forbes ranked Chen and(linking two nouns-object) his family in 75th place on a list of China's 400 richest, with wealth of US$1.34 billion. In July, a local rich list published by Money Week magazine named Chen and(linking two nouns-object) his family the ninth richest in China.

37. Use of modal verbs Para10: "The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction," Could : Express the speculation.

38. Present Participles • P6 According(present participles as adverbial)to a police officer, the assault took place shortly before midnight on July 10. • Adverbial participles play the role of a sentence element called adverbial. “According to a police officer ”modifies the main sentence and tells people the source.

39. Present Participles P6 • The victim claimed she was molested while (she was) singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted. • This sentence omit “she was”. “singing is part of the continuous verb phrase ‘was singing' . Forming the progressive aspect.

40. Past Participles Past participles indicate the completed action, forming the passive voice. • P1 • Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile, is arrested over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury home in Happy Valley. • P 2 • The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-yearold female employee at his luxury house • P4 • Chen Zhuolin,50, was arrested on Thursday.

41. Past Participles • P6 • After the clients left, she was asked to stay and sing karaoke with him. • P6 • The victim claimed she was molested while singing in a karaoke room and she was also taken to a bedroom where she was indecently assaulted ,”the police source said. • P 8 • Chen was granted police bail but is required to report back next month. No charge has been laid.

42. Past Participles • P10 • "The company has been listed for so long I don't believe any private conflict between Chen…. as some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation. • P12 • In July, a local rich list (which was )published by Money Week magazine named Chen and his family the ninth richest in China.

43. Past Participles • Past participle describes the noun as adjective. • P 4 • when he went to Wan Chai police station to answer inquiries over an alleged indecent assault( an indecent assault was alleged. Modifying a noun) • P6 • when Chen and the alleged victim held a reception for mainland clients at his house. (the victim was alleged .Modifying the victim) • P7 • She discussed the alleged incident.(the victim was alleged. Modifying the incident.) • P10 • said an analyst from a Japan-based securities firm.(Past participle act as postpositive attributive)

44. Gerunds • Gerund can be preceded by a preposition • P 1 • Chen Zhuolin, chairman of Agile, is arrested over allegation involving a 28-year-old female employee.(involving is the object of the preposition “over”) • P 2 • The chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-year-old female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley.(assaulting is the object of the preposition “of”) • P 11 • The company set a record bylaunching four property developments in one year. (launching is the object of the preposition “by”).

45. Gerunds • The gerund can perform the function of object. • P10 • as some fund managers are required to avoidinvesting in companies whose senior executives are under criminal investigation.( investing is the direct object of the verb “avoid” )

46. Relative clause • We use relative clause to give additional information about something without starting another sentence. By combining sentences with a relative clause, your text becomes more fluent and you can avoid repeating certain words. • P6 • she was also taken to a bedroom (where she was indecently assaulted.) (“Where” refers to the bedroom, the place of being assaulted) • P10 • as some fund managers are required to avoid investing in companies (whose senior executives are under criminal investigation.) (“whose” refers to companies with senior executives being under criminal investigation.)

47. Relative clause • P12 • In July, a local rich list (which was )published by Money Week magazine ]named Chen and his family the ninth richest in China. • (“which” refers to the local rich list. This clause omit subject “which” and predicate “was” .It means Money Week magazine published a local rich list)

48. Relative clause • “That” clause acts as object element and “that” is usually omitted. • P2 • The company said yesterday (that)the chairman of Agile Property Holdings was arrested on suspicion of indecently assaulting a 28-yearold female employee at his luxury house in Happy Valley. • (“that” clause is the direct object of the verb “said”)

49. Relative clause • P3 • Agile stressed (that)the incident "has not and will not affect the normal business and operations of the" Hong Kong-listed firm.(“that” clause is the direct object of the verb “stressed”) • P5 • analysts said (that) Chen'sarrest was unlikely to affect the group's ventures - especially its plan to bid for more land plots in Yunnan . (“that” clause is the direct object of the verb “said”) • P6 • The police source said (that) the victim claimed (that) she was molested while singing in a karaoke room . .(the first “that” clause is the direct object of the verb “said” and the second “that” clause is direct object of the verb “claimed”)

50. Relative clause • P7 • He said (that) the victim did not report the attack that night. (“that” clause is the direct object of the verb “said”) • P9 • analysts believe (that) the incident is unlikely to lead to any big change in the companies' share structure . (“that” clause is the direct object of the verb “believe”) • P10 • An analyst said (that) I don't believe (that) any private conflict between Chen and his wife could alter the company's future direction. (the first “that” clause is the direct object of the verb “said” and the second “that” clause is the direct object of the verb “believe”).