AGENDA • All pinnacle grades are UP TO DATE. • Fictional Narrative Post-test on Oct 5th. • DGP- Week 7 • Writing Workshop: This week you will complete the first draft of your fictional narrative….self-edit by Friday,10-1. • TURN IN your alternative HOOK!!!! 9/29. • By Friday, 10/1, everyone needs to have a COMPLETED and EDITED first draft by Mon. 10/4.
Post-Test • Review the Fictional Narrative vocabulary. • Test will be similar to the pre-test, applying fictional vocabulary elements to a short story. • There will be also be inferencing questions and a few grammar questions.
Self-edit your Narrative: • Underline your brushstrokes and identify the name of that brushstroke under that line. Add or edit if you must. 5 minimum • Appositive • Adjective Out of Order • Participle • Absolute • Action Verb • Sensory Detail: Underline and identify three passages using sensory detail.
Self-edit your paper: • Proofread for complete yet varied sentences: • Three compound sentences- labeled • Three complex sentences-labeled • Proofread for dialogue with interesting expressions. • Underline five lines of dialogue in your story. • Check that you have used varied expressions and descriptions of the speaker.
Complex vs Compound: Copy these sentences –underline all subject/verbs. • Compound has two independent clauses. • EX: Bethany walked to the store, so I asked her to pick up a gallon of milk. • Complex : has one independent clause and one dependent clause. • EX: When Bethany walked to the store, I asked her to buy a gallon of ice cream. • EX: Bethany walked to the store after I asked her to buy a gallon of milk.
Subordinating Conjunctions: Words that usually begin a dependent clause • after when • although before • as until • unless while • Since because • that though • If whether • where
Self-Edit checklist • Underline and label or ADD these elements: • Five brushstrokes: action verb, participle, absolute, adjectives out of order, appositive. • Three SD or Sensory Details • Three compound sentences • Three complex sentences • Five lines of dialogue • Proofread for commas and punctuation. • YOU ARE FININSHED!!!!!
Evaluation of Narrative: 10/1 • You will earn a PROCESS GRADE as follows: • Pre-write • Alternative Hook • First Draft • Self-Edit completed • Final Copy well proofed • You will earn a quality grade: Strong Meets 100-90, Meets89-80, or Does Not Meet 79-50.
DGP • Capitalization, Punctuation and Conjugation [we visited seattlewashington on our vacation] REGULAR Present Past Future PERFECT Present Perfect Past Perfect Future Perfect
DGP- Conjugation • Which tense uses a helping verb?? • What are those helping verbs? • What is a linking verb? • Use this DGP sentence to write an example of a separate sentence with an action verb, a helping verb, a linking verb
Three types of verbs • Your friends left their skateboards at my house. • Your friends have left their skateboards at my house. • Your friends are forgetful. • Linking verbs link the subject to a PN or a PA • Harold Syntax= predicate nominative • predicate adjective • Present-Am, is , are • Past-Was, were • Future-Will be
Clause, type, purpose • we visited seattlewashington on our vacation
Create a new beginning: HOOK 9/29 • Read the three examples OUT LOUD. • Write a NEW HOOK for your story, even if you think yours is OK-good. • Dialogue Lead • Descriptive Lead • Action Lead • When your table has finished, share the new hooks one at a time outloud. • Which one do you like better NOW? You turn in both first draft and NEW HOOK with your process piece.
Pre-write Fictional Narrative • Write three story starter ideas on the back of your rubric. • Complete the characterization of 3 characters. • Protagonist= person the story was written about. • Antagonist= person/element causing conflict in the story. • The third character is author’s choice.
Characterization Dialogue Thoughts
Change Passive to active VOICE: • Change expressions(said) and passive “to be” verbs to action words. • Circle all the “to be” verbs on one of your pages. (is, are, am, was, were, will be, has, have, had, get, got, did, said) REPLACE all circled words. • Ex: Hitler was telling people about how all Jews were to be sent to concentration camps. • Hitler informed his crowd of soldiers that the important but difficult job required removal of all Jewish residents, so as to cleanse the future of Germany. • Hitler’s agent, the black-booted guard, screamed, “Never mind your bag, woman; get into that boxcar, now, before I shoot your husband.”
Active voice: • Ex: I didn’t look, but I knew we were surrounded. • Obstructed view, and low light blocked my sight, but I felt the dark, inhuman enemy surrounding Anna, Brett and me. • It was a Tuesday afternoon, and I had just gotten out of school. • On Tuesday, school dismissed at 4:35.
Active Voice: • EX: The dark cold night in the city of New York lay quiet. Descriptive action. • As soon as they struggled to see the mysterious creature, they all ran away screaming and crying. Action verbs. • The streets were abandoned and the lights were off at every apartment. Passive voice. • Although we walked on a city street, all windows reflected darkness and every street lay abandoned. Sensory details.
“ She found something,” Rick yelled at the waiting soldiers. • I knew my mother couldn’t take care of us; we were on our own. (We were definitely abandoned.) • EX: It was a cold dark night in London town. • A cold, dark night fell over London town.
Cornell Notes: Dialogue • How does dialogue help develop my story? • How do I punctuate dialogue? • What are the two main parts of dialogue? • Now, create a short dialogue, 3-4 lines, then: • Create a Cornell Notes Sheet.
Craft a dialogue • Work in your table group. • Decide on a dialect/ education level for an informal character. Now select a formal character. Create a 4-5 line dialogue between one formal and one informal speaker. • Remember to give us a short exposition before the dialogue. • Use all three types of EXPRESSIONS
DGP Table Tutorial • POS • your friends left their skateboards at my house • Sentence Parts • Write Perfect Tenses on back!!!
DGP Table Tutorial • Work together as a table group. • Who feels confident about the process? Why? • Choose the least confident to be the recorder. • Write at least three questions about the process/sentence.
Gallery Walk • Each table group will have a question. • Students will discuss the elements of the question . • Students will write examples, elements, and ideas or further questions on the poster. Use your table group color.
Gallery Walk Questions • 1. How will I engage the reader with my fictional narrative? • 2.What are the steps of the writing process? • 3. How can I make my introduction more interesting? • 4. How will I create an organized structure, and what might it look like? • 5. What kinds of figurative language or writing elements will I apply to my story? • 6. What strategies can I use to develop tone? Give an example or three. • 7. What kinds of words or usage would be considered “DEAD WORDS”?