Connective, alphabetical spelling text (50 words or phrases). What do all of these words or phrases have in common? Chec

1. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas • Connective, alphabetical spelling text (50 words or phrases). • What do all of these words or phrases have in common? • Check your spellings within your group. • Now find categories to place each example, but each connective can only be used once.

2. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas TIME ADDING TO CONTRAST COMPARISON CONCLUDING EXPLAINING EXAMPLE firstly and alternatively likewise as a result if only for example secondly additionally an opposing view similarly consequently as we have seen for instance thirdly moreover but equally generally as with such as finally furthermore yet by comparison overall therefore next also whereas in comparison ultimately on balance later unlike to summarise so in the end although in conclusion because then on the other hand hence whilst however after this in contrast except for other than

3. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas • You have 2 minutes to write down as many connectives as possible. • Compare your list to the person next to you. • Did anyone think that their partner had written down a non-connective?

4. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas • You have 2 minutes to write down as many connectives as possible. • Compare your list to the person next to you. • Did anyone think that their partner had written down a non-connective word or phrase?

5. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas • Join together the following pairs of sentences. Try to change meanings by experimenting with different connectives. • I like walking. It is raining • Mr Ramsey is great. His lessons are interesting. • The colours are bright in item one. They are dark in item two.

6. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” • In your working groups you have 2 minutes to make notes about Item 1 … • … then have 2 minutes to make notes about Item 2 … • … then have 3 minutes to look at them together and discuss potential answers to the above question – use connectives in your discussions. • Write down the above question from paper one. • What are the ‘key words’ in this question? • Where could you make errors, when answering this? • In your working groups brainstorm potential presentational devices.

7. ITEM ONE: FROM WWW.WIKEPEDIA.COM

8. ITEM TWO: FROM WWW.FIGHTGLOBALWARMING.COM

9. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” ITEM TWO: FROM WWW.FIGHTGLOBALWARMING.COM ITEM ONE: FROM WWW.WIKEPEDIA.COM

10. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” The wikepeida advert has a white background. This is boring and this means that this page is just for info. But there is blue words for some of the main words. The page is busy with lots of writting. There is columns down the left and there are subheadings with bullet points underneath and on the right there is some graphs showing you the effects of global worming. The global worming page has a personfryed picture of an earth. It is smilling which means that it is happy. It is colourful so we look at this because the background is white. The background we can see the sun shinning and the pictures on the right are like the writing on the left and lines are used to show this. There some subheadings but these used big like words like words “neautralise” and this is hard for people like me to read, so it is not for teenagers. The hypalinks are well explained. • Now look at the following answer, supplied by a candidate.

11. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” • In small groups, discuss the positive features of this response (there are a few!).

12. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” The wikepeida advert has a white background. This is boring and this means that this page is just for info. But there is blue words for some of the main words. The page is busy with lots of writting. There is columns down the left and there are subheadings with bullet points underneath and on the right there is some graphs showing you the effects of global worming. The global worming page has a personfryed picture of an earth. It is smilling which means that it is happy. It is colourful so we look at this because the background is white. The background we can see the sun shinning and the pictures on the right are like the writing on the left and lines are used to show this. There some subheadings but these used big like words like words “neautralise” and this is hard for people like me to read, so it is not for teenagers. The hypalinks are well explained.

13. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” • Positive features • Some relevant presentational devices are discussed (colour, columns, illustrations etc.). • More than 3 devices are considered. • Some references to “effectiveness”. • Target audience is identified.

14. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” • Now, discuss what advice you would give to this candidate to improve their work?

15. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” The wikepeida advert has a white background. This is boring and this means that this page is just for info. But there is blue words for some of the main words. The page is busy with lots of writting. There is columns down the left and there are subheadings with bullet points underneath and on the right there is some graphs showing you the effects of global worming. The global worming page has a personfryed picture of an earth. It is smilling which means that it is happy. It is colourful so we look at this because the background is white. The background we can see the sun shinning and the pictures on the right are like the writing on the left and lines are used to show this. There some subheadings but these used big like words like words “neautralise” and this is hard for people like me to read, so it is not for teenagers. The hypalinks are well explained.

16. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” Apart from the ‘obvious’ spelling, punctuation and grammatical errors, they could … • Make the response directly comparative. • Do not waste time analysing more than 3 devices. • Avoid referring to language devices. • Seek alternative interpretations, to suggest alternative audience reactions.

17. “Compare the effectiveness of three presentational devices in Item One and Item Two. How are these devices used to target audiences?” • The above question is worth 6 marks out of 27. • How long will you spend planning? • How long will you spend writing? • Using both web pages, write an improved response to the question:

18. In your groups recap the improvement strategies, without looking at anyone’s work. Now swap your work with a partner and provide some comments that you think will help to improve the quality of their response. Feedback this improvement to another person in the class (this cannot be the owner of the essay!) Return to the person whose work you are seeking to improve and give them the improvement strategy. Objective: To improve responses when comparing texts/ideas