REVISION: Elevating your Style
Directions • Friends don’t let friends hand in crappy papers. • So….offer constructive feedback so your classmates may improve their work! • If something is definitely incorrect, mark it in red pen. • If something doesn’t seem quite right, but you have having trouble pinpointing the exact problem, highlight it in yellow. • When you hear the magic wand, rotate paper to the right. • Ultimately, everyone is responsible for his/her own work!! But, everyone appreciates help!
Proper Heading and Headers PROPER FIRST PAGE HEADING: First Last Mrs. Holton English III-Period 20 October 2010 PROPER HEADER AFTER PAGE 1: Holton 2 If there is a header on the 1st page (Holton 1) cross it out
OVERALL MLA FORMATTING • Title should be centered below the heading • Entire paper should be double-spaced with no extra spaces between lines. (If incorrect, SPACING) • Font should be Times New Roman 12 pt font (If incorrect, FONT) • All Paragraphs should be indented (If incorrect, INDENT)
WORKS CITED • WORKS CITED should be centered at the top of the final page of the paper (ALL CAPS) • Minimum of 5 entries total • If either Whitman or Hughes is cited, the other must be there too. • Entries are alphabetized ( ALPHA) • Hanging Indent for all entries: Last, First. “Title of Poem.” The Language of Literature
WORKS CITED • Double Spaced with no extra line spaces between entries • All titles are Capitalized • All poem titles are in “Title.” (Bradstreet/Longfellow/Whitman/Hughes) • All book titles are italicized (Equiano/Douglass/Thoreau/The Language of Literature: American Literature)
WORKS CITED • There are PERIODS AFTER ALL SEPARATE PARTS OF THE ENTRIES. • Last, First. “Poem.” The Language of Literature: American Literature. (entry cont…)
BRADSTREET Literature PARAGRAPH • Claim is arguable and addresses Bradsteet’s value(s) ( CLAIM) • Both of the titles of the poems are in “__” and are in the first sentences of the paragraph • Has textual support from both of the poems ( MISSING TEXT)
BRADSTREET Literature PARAGRAPH • In-text citation gives the lines numbers from the poem • Period outside the citation • Example: (3-5). • ( Correct Citation).
BRADSTREET Literature PARAGRAPH • The writer’s own words introduce the quotation • Example: Bradstreet writes, “___” (5-6). • ( QUOTE INTRO) • Quotation from the text is appropriate for the claim ( BETTER QUOTE) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary explains what is Bradstreet’s primary value AND why ( COMMENTARY)
BRADSTREET Literature PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
REFLECTION Value PARAGRAPH • Transition sentence helps move from Bradstreet to claim of this value in the real world today • Claim is arguable and addresses change/relevancy of value(s) ( CLAIM) • Has real life support with concrete descriptions and specific examples ( CONCRETE SUPPORT) • Has at least two examples for support ( ++)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • If any outside source is referenced, there needs to be a proper in-text citation AND an entry in the WORKS CITED page. (If either of these is missing, ( CITE!) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary explains WHY the claim about the value in today’s world is true ( COMMENTARY)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
SLAVE NARRATIVE Literature PARAGRAPH • Claim is arguable and addresses HOW Equiano and Douglass convey their value of freedom ( CLAIM) • Both of the titles of the books are in Italics and are in the first sentences of the paragraph ( TITLES) • Has textual support from both of the poems ( MISSING TEXT)
SLAVE NARRATIVE Literature PARAGRAPH • Addresses HOW (imagery, appeals to pathos, etc) Equiano and Douglass convey their value of freedom ( LITERARY TERM) • In-text citation gives the page numbers from the book • Period outside the citation • Example: (565). • ( Correct Citation).
SLAVE NARRATIVE Literature PARAGRAPH • The writer’s own words introduce the quotation • Example: Douglass writes, “___” (565). • ( QUOTE INTRO) • Quotation from the text is appropriate for the claim ( BETTER QUOTE) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary explains HOW Equiano and Douglass convey their value of freedom( COMMENTARY) • Paragraph is Organized with all of Equiano together and all of Douglass together ( ORGANIZE)
SLAVE NARRATIVE Literature PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
REFLECTION Value PARAGRAPH • Transition sentence helps move from Equiano/Douglass to claim of the value of freedom in the real world today • Claim is arguable and addresses change/relevancy of freedom ( CLAIM) • Has real life support with concrete descriptions and specific examples ( CONCRETE SUPPORT) • Has at least two examples for support ( ++)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • If any outside source is references, there needs to be a proper in-text citation AND an entry in the WORKS CITED page. (If either of these is missing, ( CITE!) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary explains WHY the claim about freedom in today’s world is true ( COMMENTARY)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
CHOICE Literature PARAGRAPH • Claim is arguable and addresses the value of ( CLAIM) • Books and “Poems” are in the first sentences of the paragraph ( TITLES) • Has textual support from any of the works ( MISSING TEXT)
CHOICE Literature PARAGRAPH • In-text citation gives the page numbers from the book or line numbers from the poem • Period outside the citation • Example: (388). (41-44). • ( Correct Citation).
CHOICE Literature PARAGRAPH • The writer’s own words introduce the quotation • Example: Author writes, “___” (380). • ( QUOTE INTRO) • Quotation from the text is appropriate for the claim ( BETTER QUOTE) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary clearly supports the claim about the value ( COMMENTARY) • If did Whitman/Hughes, organized by author ( ORGANIZE)
CHOICE Literature PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
REFLECTION Value PARAGRAPH • Transition sentence helps move from literature to claim of the value in the real world today • Claim is arguable and addresses change/relevancy of the value ( CLAIM) • Has real life support with concrete descriptions and specific examples ( CONCRETE SUPPORT) • Has at least two examples for support ( ++)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • If any outside source is references, there needs to be a proper in-text citation AND an entry in the WORKS CITED page. (If either of these is missing, ( CITE!) • Commentary dominates the paragraph • Commentary explains WHY the claim about value in today’s world is true ( COMMENTARY)
REFLECTION value PARAGRAPH • Circle any of the following if they are not in a quotation from the text: • Contractions • (didn’t/won’t/it’s/can’t/etc) • Circle any first or second person • (I/me/my/myself you/your/yourself) • Vague words (bad/good/nice/blah/blah/blah)
Read the whole darn thing • List an areas where you are having trouble understanding or you find confusing
