Goals for this quarter:

1. Goals for this quarter: • Find your writing voice • How? Practice! • Review grammar • After the review, you are responsible for knowing it. • Write essays

2. Your Writing Notebook

3. ASAP You need to get a notebook that will at times be left here in the classroom. I won’t be reading the whole thing, but just pages once in awhile.

4. Setting up your writer’s notebook: • Never tear out a page of your notebook. • Leave a fly page up front, just like in books. • Number pages only on the right-hand side, starting after the fly page. • Write the page number on the bottom right-hand side. • Only write on the right-hand pages of the notebook. Keep the left-hand pages blank for revising, rethinking, and tinkering with the facing numbered page.

5. What will be in your notebook? • Writing • You will freewrite, respond, prewrite, create, shape, take notes, and play with your writing. • Your first assignment: Prewrite on the topic “hair.’

6. Freewriting Rules! • Write. Just write. Keep your hand moving. • Experiment with spelling, punctuation, and grammar. • Go wherever your writing takes you. • Be specific. • As Natalie Goldberg says, “You are free to write the worst junk in America” (1990, p. 4).

7. Hair • Open the first section of your writer’s notebook. • Put today’s date, and write Hair across the top. • Wherever the writing takes you, go with it. • Just keep writing. • The key word is hair.

8. BEDHEAD by Margie Palatini Shuffle-shlump. Shuffle-shlump. Shuffle-shlump, shlumped bleary-eyed Oliver out of bed, down the hall, and into the bathroom. He yawned. He yanked. Splashed some water. Swished some mouthwash. Gave his front teeth a passable brushing. And then…

9. BEDHEAD by Margie Palatini In a gunkless corner of the soapy silver soap dish…in a fogless smidgen of his father’s foggy shaving mirror…right there on the hot water faucet, for heaven’s sake…he saw it! It was…

10. BEDHEAD by Margie Palatini BEDHEAD! Oliver’s hair was out of control. Way out of control. There was hair going this way. Hair going that way. Hair going up. Down. Around and around. And there was one teeny tiny clump of hair way at the back of his head that looked just like a cat’s coughed-up fur ball.

11. Ways to use a HYPHEN • To make a compound word • Baked-too-fast cake • Three-year-old • Mother-in-law

12. Ways to use a HYPHEN • To join two or more words that serve as a single adjective (a single-thought adjective) before a noun. • big-boned woman • man-working hands

13. Ways to use a HYPHEN • Usually used to form new words beginning with the prefixes self, ex, all, great, half • half-eaten ex-mayor self-inflicted • great-aunt all-around good player • To avoid confusion • shell-like (not shelllike) shape • re-cover (not recover) the sofa

14. BEDHEAD by Margie Palatini Mom leaned close to the door. Closer. Closer. That’s right—even closer. “Is everything all right, Oliver?” she whispered in her calmest calm Mom voice. “Come now, dear. Open the door and let us in.” No sound from Oliver. Not a whimper. Not a peep. “Please?” said Mom. “Pretty please?...Pretty, pretty, pretty please?...” The doorknob s l o w l y turned.

15. Hair • Look at your “Hair” freewriting. • Play around with your text, imitating any of Palatin’s punctuation or conventions.

16. Hair Rewrites • Freewrite I took out the bobby pins my mother has so carefully put in my hair last night. When I looked in the mirror, I saw these limp hanging locks. I looked ridiculous. • Rewrite It’s 8:05. I have five minutes to tame my mess. So—I used water. I used gel. I used hairspray. I looked in the mirror…and my hair was still BaaaaaAAdddddd!

17. Your Notebook: Section 2 • Your Writer’s Eye (I) • Lists of things you can write about • Things you observe • A collection of people, places, games, hobbies, interests

18. Writer’s Make a list of all the things you know—fill up the whole page. dieting puzzles my boys budgeting My sister new recipes Callie , Audrey, & Gertie My hubby

19. Writer’s Make a list of all the things you know—fill up the whole page. I My family: hubby, boys, daughters-in-law AND Callie, Audrey, and Gertie. Gardening, books, puzzles, movies. Camper, lake, floating. Half-finished quilts. Trying new technology. Walking in the morning NOT. Friends. Grey’s Anatomy Kids, kids, kids, kids, kids, kids, kids, kids, kids

20. Metaphors • Metaphors are comparisons that show how two things that are not alike in most ways are similar in one important way. • Metaphors are a way to describe something. • Authors use them to make their writing more interesting or entertaining. • Unlike similes that use the words “as” or “like” to make a comparison, metaphors state that something is something else.

21. Fabric Metaphors • Turn to your first page after your Writer’s Eye. • Write today’s date and Fabric Metaphors • Think about the many times each day you touch some kind of fabric. • Brainstorm a list of the fabrics you come in contact with during a typical day.

22. Fabric Metaphors Using fabrics and other materials as metaphors, try some abstract thinking about who you are. What textures, patterns, and colors represent your many aspects?

23. Begin by considering these questions: • Are you soft and light (silk, chiffon)? • Rough and tough (leather)? • Smooth (satin, plastic)? • Do you often feel fuzzy (fake fur) or well-defined (vinyl)? • Which are you most like: a busy pattern or a plain solid? • Which best describes you best: stripes or plaids? • Are you basic and practical (cotton) or extravagant and expensive (silk, brocade, velvet)? • Add your own metaphors to this list.

24. Fabric Metaphors • Make a vertical list of 10-12 of your personal characteristics. • Match each one with a texture or fabric. (Keep thinking in metaphors!) • Examples: • Clean and neat = starched white cotton • Dependable = blue denim • Flexible thinker = spandex

25. Author’s Word and Phrase Palette As you read, record words or phrases that strike you for myriad reasons. • Active verbs • Writing snaps and sizzles when active, lively verbs are used. • Cool words

26. Author’s Word and Phrase Palette • Phrases or combinations that work • Alliteration, parallelism • These word combinations dance on the page or dive into our senses. • Contrasts/comparisons: similes, metaphors, sensory images Look for something fresh, new, original, and something to aspire to as a writer

27. Gems: Sentences and Paragraphs That Work • “Gems” will always be full sentences or more. • Hunt down • sentences that work, • strings of sentences, • Paragraphs that make you stop, bend over, pick up the gem and see it sparkle in the light from many angles.

28. Gems: Sentences and Paragraphs that Work There was hair going this way. Hair going that way. Hair going up. Down. Around and around. And there was one teeny tiny clump of hair way at the back of his head that looked just like a cat’s coughed-up fur ball. (Bedhead, many pages)

29. Gems: Sentences and Paragraphs that Work • This cake tastes like vacuum cleaner fuzz. (Korman 2000, p. 2) • Her open eye was like nearly black balsamic vinegar beading on white china. (Franzen 2001, p. 31) • Her voice was rough, like a bus grinding its brakes. (Mack 2003, p. 36) • Sweat crawled all over me like ants (Hale 2004, p. 2)

30. Your Assignment Fill at least three pages in your notebook with examples from the book you are reading. • Words • Phrases • Sentences • Paragraphs • Figurative language Due Thursday, September 18!

31. Paperclip Paragraphs • Bend and twist your paperclip into any shape you desire. • Write a paragraph describing your paperclip, concentrating on its new shape and its possible use. • Due tomorrow: turn in both paragraph and paperclip.

32. Paperclip Paragraph ID • Spend a few minutes reading your description. • Find the paper clip that matches your description. • One by one, read your description aloud. • As a class determine if the paperclip matches the description.

33. Are you tired of nobody hearing you? “Writing gives that power, and part of writing’s power is in its passion, its details, but all of that is lost if the grammar and mechanics can’t hold the message together.” Jeff Anderson, Mechanically Inclined

34. “You don’t need an encyclopedic knowledge of grammatical terms to write and edit with precision. I couldn’t diagram a sentence if my life depended on it.” Bill Walsh, Lapsing into a Comma

35. Fragments • What is it? • Incomplete sentence • Why do you do it? • Trying to add compound sentences • “Writer’s should master the complete-sentence technique before getting fragment happy.” –Bill Walsh, The Elephants of Style • Subject and a Verb = Complete Sentence

36. They race.--Jerry Spinelli, Loser (p. 5) • Who or what did something? • The subject is They • What did they do? • The verb is race

37. Two-Word Sentences • Matt winces (p. 364) • Maria flinched (p. 366) • Matt froze (p. 370) • Matt nodded (p. 372) --Nancy Farmer, House of the Scorpion • Tad watched. (p. 6) • Blood flew. (p. 111) • He sprung. (p. 128) --Stephen King, Cujo

38. Turning the Knob Blurry Sentence: I walked into the McDonalds and there were people everywhere."

39. Turn the knob by asking questions • What did they look like? (eyes) • What were they wearing? (eyes) • What were they doing? (eyes ears) • What did it smell like? (nose) • What was the air like? (touch) • What was in your mouth? (taste)

40. I walked into the McDonalds and there were people everywhere." The workmen leaned on the stainless steel counters, bellies bursting out of stained tee shirts. An old man in the corner held an aluminum cane in one hand and a rolled up newspaper in the other. He swatted at flies as the workers scurried behind the counters, stuffing bags with greasy burgers, rushing to the beeping fryolaters to scoop the golden greasy potato sticks, slinging steaming robot food into cardboard trays and paper bags. The smell of sizzling fat hung in the air and I could taste swallow and digest that hamburger before the young girl could say, "Have a nice day."

41. Run-On Sentences • What is it? • Fused sentences, lack of end marks, lack of punctuation, stringy sentences, “andthenitus” (strings of “and then” in place of periods). • Why do you do it? • Maybe you have a lot to write and you get “breathless.” • Maybe you have a lack of understanding of a simple sentence.

42. Dependent Vs. Independent—Adding on without Running On • They handle the BB gun carelessly. • Trading it back and forth. • They handle the BB gun carelessly, trading it back and forth. • They handle the gun carelessly, trading it back and forth, each slinging the barrel over his should like a hunter in a frontier television show. Winter Birds Jim Grimsley p. 1

43. Dependent Vs. Independent—Adding on without Running On They are shouting your name, asking if dinner is ready yet. (p. 1) --Jim Grimsley, Winter Birds And Furlough found his brother in the library, standing on top of the great open book, his tail wrapped tightly around his feet, his small body shivering. (p. 46) --Kate DiCamillo, The Tale of Despereaux

44. Dependent Vs. Independent—Adding on without Running On Abraham was growing fast, shooting up like a sunflower, a spindly youngster with big boney hands, unruly black hair, a dark complexion, and luminous gray eyes. (p. 11) --Russell Freedman Lincoln: A Photobiography

45. Dependent Vs. Independent—Adding on without Running On They are shouting your name, asking if dinner is ready yet. (p. 1) --Jim Grimsley, Winter Birds And Furlough found his brother in the library, standing on top of the great open book, his tail wrapped tightly around his feet, his small body shivering. (p. 46) --Kate DiCamillo, The Tale of Despereaux

46. Sentence , closer . Core Sentence + additions attached and grouped with commas Independent clause (sentence) + dependents

47. Visualize Sentences • Close your eyes and picture a dog approaching you. • The dog approached me. • Add ing words • What does a dog do?

48. Modifiers – Mentor Text • Barking furiously, Cujo gave chase. (p. 18) • Cujo trailed at Brett’s heels, looking hot and dispirited. (p. 46) • Cujo stood at the edge of the lawn, his great head lowered, his eyes reddish and filmy, growling. (p. 110 Stephen King, Cujo

49. Modifiers – Mentor Text The dog stood up like a lion, stiff-standing hackles, teeth uncovered as he lashed up his fury for the charge. (p. 166) --Zora Neale Hurston, Their Eyes Were Watching God

50. Modifiers – Mentor Text And this particular afternoon, I’m about halfway up the road along the river when I see something out of the corner of my eye. Something moves. I look, and about fifteen yards off, there’s the shorthaired dog—white with brown and black spots—not making any kind of noise, just slinking along with his head down, watching me, tail between his legs like he’s hardly got the right to breathe. A beagle, maybe a year or two old. (p. 4) --Phyllis Reynolds Naylor, Shiloh